2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desolating Grief "A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from mfowler
The fire you write about was immensely devastating so your alliterative opening line is appropriate to start with. The death and destruction were of such proportion that 'devastating grief' is a perfect closer. Your characterisation of the trees pleading is excellent as each one was in the path of the.wildfire. A sad but dramatic entry. Perfect for the prompt.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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The fire you write about was immensely devastating so your alliterative opening line is appropriate to start with. The death and destruction were of such proportion that 'devastating grief' is a perfect closer. Your characterisation of the trees pleading is excellent as each one was in the path of the.wildfire. A sad but dramatic entry. Perfect for the prompt.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, i appreciate your excellent review
Comment from nomi338
Your stark words lend themselves perfectly to the stark picture of the aftermath of a devastating fire. Looking at the picture I can almost smell the smoke and ash of the fire. A Forrest fire can devastate like few other things can.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Your stark words lend themselves perfectly to the stark picture of the aftermath of a devastating fire. Looking at the picture I can almost smell the smoke and ash of the fire. A Forrest fire can devastate like few other things can.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you nomi, i appreciate your excellent review
Comment from Jackarrie
This is a good entry into the tree hugger 5-7-5 contest. It is also very sad. Yet reality.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This is a good entry into the tree hugger 5-7-5 contest. It is also very sad. Yet reality.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you Jackarrie, or Mary? I appreciate your excellent review.
Comment from c_lucas
Forest fires are one of nature's deadly forces, but the results will rejuvenate the landscape. Unfortunately, the kill the wildlife and destroy habitats. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Forest fires are one of nature's deadly forces, but the results will rejuvenate the landscape. Unfortunately, the kill the wildlife and destroy habitats. This is very well written.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you clucas, i appreciate your excellent review
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Thank you for your review and comments,
Comment from MizKat
Hi Poet,
Your poem is really good and the picture of what happened is sad to see. I really enjoyed reading your author notes. How terrible that the fire in Greece lasted for 10 days and caused so many things, people, and animals to be destroyed.
MizKat
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Hi Poet,
Your poem is really good and the picture of what happened is sad to see. I really enjoyed reading your author notes. How terrible that the fire in Greece lasted for 10 days and caused so many things, people, and animals to be destroyed.
MizKat
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you mizkat, i appreciate your comments
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You're very welcome. It was a joy to read your poem.
Comment from Eric1
Hi mystery author, well this is a different take on the usual process of competition entries, good use of alliteration and a nice refreshing change from the norm, good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Hi mystery author, well this is a different take on the usual process of competition entries, good use of alliteration and a nice refreshing change from the norm, good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you for the review eric, i appreciate your review and kind words
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No problem, it truly was my pleasure my friend.
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a well crafted haiku. Short forms are difficult mostly as word choice is important. You have painted a good imagery with few words.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This is a well crafted haiku. Short forms are difficult mostly as word choice is important. You have painted a good imagery with few words.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you hareem, i appreciate your review
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is so sad, mystery writer, I hate when the wildfire season flares up in the summertime. so many careless people, lightening strikes and intentional sets make for firefighters to have a busy and dangerous career. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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this is so sad, mystery writer, I hate when the wildfire season flares up in the summertime. so many careless people, lightening strikes and intentional sets make for firefighters to have a busy and dangerous career. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you sweetwoodjax, i appreciate your review
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
definitely fits the prompt. it has trees in it.
A lot of emotion packed into the piece, and the writer's notes make it much more poignant.
Good luck in the contest
GMG
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
definitely fits the prompt. it has trees in it.
A lot of emotion packed into the piece, and the writer's notes make it much more poignant.
Good luck in the contest
GMG
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you giraffmang, i appreciate your review
Comment from buggaboo4699
This was a very interesting 5-7-5. Usually if they are about nature then they're about the beauty of the trees, but this has historical background. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This was a very interesting 5-7-5. Usually if they are about nature then they're about the beauty of the trees, but this has historical background. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you buggaboo, i appreciate your review