The Winter Fishing Fleet
Another Heroic Sonnet59 total reviews
Comment from MacMhuirich
This is a class write my friend. The fishing fleets that left these shores in search of food did so under perilous conditions no matter the season. This well worded sonnet has wonderful wording and great imagery. thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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This is a class write my friend. The fishing fleets that left these shores in search of food did so under perilous conditions no matter the season. This well worded sonnet has wonderful wording and great imagery. thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, John. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your very kind comments and six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Marykelly
The longer sonnet form seems appropriate for the setting of this poem. The setting seems rather primitive and dangerous for the fishing crew that seem vulnerable themselves to the whimsy of wind and water. There is an intensity to the tone in the fact that there is danger, but a matter of fact tone in the sense that the job simply needs to be done. The imagery is vivid.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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The longer sonnet form seems appropriate for the setting of this poem. The setting seems rather primitive and dangerous for the fishing crew that seem vulnerable themselves to the whimsy of wind and water. There is an intensity to the tone in the fact that there is danger, but a matter of fact tone in the sense that the job simply needs to be done. The imagery is vivid.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Mary. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from RoostyNester
I'm not a fisherman, but I feel I was there. I felt that this was the job that these men tackled often, to bring home the fish of the day. I liked the rhyme of the poem with the unusual words that your used. It was fresh, not common, in style and form. I liked the poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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I'm not a fisherman, but I feel I was there. I felt that this was the job that these men tackled often, to bring home the fish of the day. I liked the rhyme of the poem with the unusual words that your used. It was fresh, not common, in style and form. I liked the poem.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, RoostyNester. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your comments. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome.
Comment from djsaxon
Burned my six packs but please accept a virtual. Beautiful. The language so supports the early form. "slop-wallow as they slacken off their stays." Awesome, and just one gorgeous line of many throughout the write. I cannot presume to critique this. Simply acknowledge your pen.
Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Burned my six packs but please accept a virtual. Beautiful. The language so supports the early form. "slop-wallow as they slacken off their stays." Awesome, and just one gorgeous line of many throughout the write. I cannot presume to critique this. Simply acknowledge your pen.
Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, DJ. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your very kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Beara Bella
I really like this with most of the wording like the fishermen being tossed by bait part, but there are a few issues for me. I want another word than fearsome when describing the storm. Some that really fits the poem better and striking to the teader. Also I want another word than mighty for the waves. Something different so monstrous is out. Also skip a beat is really cliche and it definitely doesn't help the poem have the strongest end. Other than that, great job.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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I really like this with most of the wording like the fishermen being tossed by bait part, but there are a few issues for me. I want another word than fearsome when describing the storm. Some that really fits the poem better and striking to the teader. Also I want another word than mighty for the waves. Something different so monstrous is out. Also skip a beat is really cliche and it definitely doesn't help the poem have the strongest end. Other than that, great job.
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Beara Bella. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your comments. There is certainly something in what you say and I have re-visited the poem in the light of your suggestions and other feedback received. However, I do not presently see an alternative wording that fits the rhyme scheme, and the rhythm of the Herioc Sonnet whilst maintaining my intent. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Ben Colder
Must applaud the writer. The length of this poem has no baring on the message it brings. The photo enhances such powerful stanzas. Well done, Poet.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Must applaud the writer. The length of this poem has no baring on the message it brings. The photo enhances such powerful stanzas. Well done, Poet.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Ben. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from foxangie123
What a most amazing write with the most enjoyable read. I so enjoy these that you write. Way to go as they are top of the line. Bravo and kudos to you. I live to learn.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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What a most amazing write with the most enjoyable read. I so enjoy these that you write. Way to go as they are top of the line. Bravo and kudos to you. I live to learn.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your review of The Winter Fishing Fleet, Angie. I'm a little behind with my responses as it's been a particularly busy couple of weeks for me. However, I very much appreciated your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
You're so masterful with sonnets, my friend. Always flawless meter, rich descriptive quality, fine phonetic resonance with poetic devices and inventive rhyming. This one has an interesting volta and an excellent closing couplet. Reading this aloud is absolutely delicious, especially the first stanza with all those S SOUNDS PLUS W AND B.
FAVORITE LINES (PHONETICALLY):
slop-wallow as they slacken off their stays.
and:
but how this calm belies the banshee yell
of North Sea winds swept from the Russian steppe
briny graves - great word choice there!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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You're so masterful with sonnets, my friend. Always flawless meter, rich descriptive quality, fine phonetic resonance with poetic devices and inventive rhyming. This one has an interesting volta and an excellent closing couplet. Reading this aloud is absolutely delicious, especially the first stanza with all those S SOUNDS PLUS W AND B.
FAVORITE LINES (PHONETICALLY):
slop-wallow as they slacken off their stays.
and:
but how this calm belies the banshee yell
of North Sea winds swept from the Russian steppe
briny graves - great word choice there!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, RD. I was uncertain about 'slop-wallow' as, although it seemed to describe the sound and movement of idle sailing ships at anchor, it isn't really in iambic rhythm! I thought the deviation justified in this case though and valued your endorsement and the six stars!
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Iambic meter, done masterfully, can have metrical substitutions. :)
:-)))
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellent piece on the age of fishing.
I need to ask, what did you mean by the fishermen thrown as bait? This confused me and there were no notes to explain.
Excellent sonnet form
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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An excellent piece on the age of fishing.
I need to ask, what did you mean by the fishermen thrown as bait? This confused me and there were no notes to explain.
Excellent sonnet form
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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I intended to suggest that in the violent North Sea storms, there is a danger of men being swept overboard.
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Thank you, I understand