Speed Thrills But Accuracy Kills
Sometimes Being Last is a good thing59 total reviews
Comment from LaRosa
Pretty well done for only twenty minutes to work in!
Harkening to an old cowboy movie you remind the reader of the importance of patience as well as skill in life.
The image of the child in the picture reaching for his play guns as he watches his hero is a good pick as it adds to the sense of life and death being played out.
I stopped to think a moment with the fifth stanza. Never could figure out why gunfights always started with the drink which could slow reflexes. Ah hah! Last chance to enjoy a potential last moment!
'We've stepped (off) our pace,...'
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Pretty well done for only twenty minutes to work in!
Harkening to an old cowboy movie you remind the reader of the importance of patience as well as skill in life.
The image of the child in the picture reaching for his play guns as he watches his hero is a good pick as it adds to the sense of life and death being played out.
I stopped to think a moment with the fifth stanza. Never could figure out why gunfights always started with the drink which could slow reflexes. Ah hah! Last chance to enjoy a potential last moment!
'We've stepped (off) our pace,...'
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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enjoyed it, easy to do!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In a petty war, it is sometimes being last is a good thing, speed thrills at war time in the battlefield but accuracy kills; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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In a petty war, it is sometimes being last is a good thing, speed thrills at war time in the battlefield but accuracy kills; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem, it is a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
It reminded me of those cowboy movies they were the best.
I believe it is also written Last will be first
And first shall be last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie PS
i lost all my work have to start over again I would honored to have you for my fan.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem, it is a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
It reminded me of those cowboy movies they were the best.
I believe it is also written Last will be first
And first shall be last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie PS
i lost all my work have to start over again I would honored to have you for my fan.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Cookie for reading and reviewing my work.
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Your very welcome.
Take care.
Cookie
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those gun fights at high noon must have been a joy for the grim reaper! And after a few beers, the aim would have been destabilised! A fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Those gun fights at high noon must have been a joy for the grim reaper! And after a few beers, the aim would have been destabilised! A fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Dolly for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from country ranch writer
Sometimes being fast is not fast enough some learn this lesson the hard way. There is always so one faster than you eventually
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Sometimes being fast is not fast enough some learn this lesson the hard way. There is always so one faster than you eventually
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm liking your cowboy poem. It sounded like you were getting ready for a true gun fight! I like the picture that you chose for your poem. The gunfight its so real
Good lock on the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I'm liking your cowboy poem. It sounded like you were getting ready for a true gun fight! I like the picture that you chose for your poem. The gunfight its so real
Good lock on the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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You're welcome
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ten points for the bravery of writing under the gun:)Your western poem could be considered the beginning of a western saga. The poem has a certain cadenza and effect that brings forward a certain era by using specific images as : "saloon , hired gun etc". Good luck
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Ten points for the bravery of writing under the gun:)Your western poem could be considered the beginning of a western saga. The poem has a certain cadenza and effect that brings forward a certain era by using specific images as : "saloon , hired gun etc". Good luck
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
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Comment from LisaMay
'Being Last is a good thing' is definitely correct in this encounter. I don't quite understand what you mean by this line: 'We've stepped of our pace,' but the rest of the storytelling is terrific. There, was I kind enough? I wouldn't want to shoot you down, pardner.
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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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'Being Last is a good thing' is definitely correct in this encounter. I don't quite understand what you mean by this line: 'We've stepped of our pace,' but the rest of the storytelling is terrific. There, was I kind enough? I wouldn't want to shoot you down, pardner.
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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They stepped oof the distance between them for the fight. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. The
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They stepped oof the distance between them for the fight. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. The
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In your reply you have written: "They stepped oof the distance" So I am still confused. Is word processing doing something to your intended word?
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Have you ever watched a gunfight in a western movie. The put distance about 10 paces as a prelude to the fight. Does that help?
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OK. I'm just wondering why you are spelling it strangely.
Comment from Mia Twysted
That piece was a little hard to read. It does not roll off the tongue to easily. Many places seemed as if they were missing pieces or words. I understood that there was a gunfight about to happen, but I had a hard time letting the image wash over me.
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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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That piece was a little hard to read. It does not roll off the tongue to easily. Many places seemed as if they were missing pieces or words. I understood that there was a gunfight about to happen, but I had a hard time letting the image wash over me.
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Could you clarify your rating with suggestions
