Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Barbaraj1
A well-done poem. I like this form and will have to try it in the future.
I love the way you describe the different ways to protect yourself
when it's so cold..........socks, scarves, gloves, and fire.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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A well-done poem. I like this form and will have to try it in the future.
I love the way you describe the different ways to protect yourself
when it's so cold..........socks, scarves, gloves, and fire.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Barbara, we have to cover up very well in harsh climes.
Comment from BeasPeas
I like this form. I may try one. Interesting. Gungalo who originated the form was on FS when I first joined in 2012. I like your take on keeping warm and the socks on toes. It seems that if our head and feet are warm, (hands, too) so is the rest of us. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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I like this form. I may try one. Interesting. Gungalo who originated the form was on FS when I first joined in 2012. I like your take on keeping warm and the socks on toes. It seems that if our head and feet are warm, (hands, too) so is the rest of us. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Marilyn, I agree that this form is very special. What a great tribute a Gungalo to kick off the twenty year of FS
Comment from Bobby Jo
This reminds me of when I was little and we had to go to my grandmother's house for we had no heat she had a foot heater that ran on propane. This was fun
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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This reminds me of when I was little and we had to go to my grandmother's house for we had no heat she had a foot heater that ran on propane. This was fun
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thank you Bobby Jo!
Comment from Therese Caron
I live where it becomes 20 below with snow and this poem feels like a slightly old fashioned version of protecting yourself against the elements. I love it. There is nothing cozier. This poem has a wonderful rhyme scheme. The starkness of the black and white photo adds to the words.
Beautiful poem.
Terry C.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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I live where it becomes 20 below with snow and this poem feels like a slightly old fashioned version of protecting yourself against the elements. I love it. There is nothing cozier. This poem has a wonderful rhyme scheme. The starkness of the black and white photo adds to the words.
Beautiful poem.
Terry C.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Terry thank you, I do not miss one day of winter anywhere in the northern US States.
Comment from May 1
I loved this poem. It is such a nice poem to read in wintertime. It creates a feeling of warmth and comfort when the weather outside is not as pleasant. All in all, a very pleasant read.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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I loved this poem. It is such a nice poem to read in wintertime. It creates a feeling of warmth and comfort when the weather outside is not as pleasant. All in all, a very pleasant read.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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May, I am grateful!
Comment from Hitcher
Tis summer here in NZ at present and it has been scorching thus far. I was however raised in the north east of England so know all about the twenty below with snow and getting rugged up and warmed up by a coal fire.
Very nice poetry which offers up visuals that most will be able to relate to.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Tis summer here in NZ at present and it has been scorching thus far. I was however raised in the north east of England so know all about the twenty below with snow and getting rugged up and warmed up by a coal fire.
Very nice poetry which offers up visuals that most will be able to relate to.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thanks for the review, but I know your winters to be rugged, yes?
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Not here on the North Island of NZ friend. I have seen snow fall in Taupo(where I live) maybe four times in 17 years. we get good frosts which are normally gone by 10/11am in the winter The south Island... that is a whole different story, they get the full force of winter : ))
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a lovely 20 below verse.
The Coles Rhythm is nicely done and the verse reads smoothly within it.
A nice entry for the Potlatch Poetry Challenge.
Well done
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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I think this is a lovely 20 below verse.
The Coles Rhythm is nicely done and the verse reads smoothly within it.
A nice entry for the Potlatch Poetry Challenge.
Well done
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Sharon, thank you! I truly enjoyed this style, what a nice tribute to this missing FS soul.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Lovely poem, beautiful picture! I enjoyed the Cole's rhythm and the rhyme scheme, well done. The refrain "socks on toes" works very well for the theme of dealing with cold weather.
Small errors to correct:
"keep dry for all you're worth"
"keeping matches drier"
That's all.
Cozy poem!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Lovely poem, beautiful picture! I enjoyed the Cole's rhythm and the rhyme scheme, well done. The refrain "socks on toes" works very well for the theme of dealing with cold weather.
Small errors to correct:
"keep dry for all you're worth"
"keeping matches drier"
That's all.
Cozy poem!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thanks Mary Kay, to meet the syllable count I needed do something else. I love and valuer your input, always!
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You're very welcome and thank you as always for your gracious reply.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your poem made me feel chilly and wearing socks on toes to keep warm is a great idea on those freezing nights in the snow. I looked at this contest and could not understand the Coles Rhythm as I just didn't get it, so I'm glad you gave it a try, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Your poem made me feel chilly and wearing socks on toes to keep warm is a great idea on those freezing nights in the snow. I looked at this contest and could not understand the Coles Rhythm as I just didn't get it, so I'm glad you gave it a try, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thank you Dolly, I enjoyed this style. What a nice tribute to a FS missing soul!
Comment from Ricky1024
"Twenty Below with Snow?
In South Jersey I don't think so but if it does happen again I want to put on my electric undies my hand warmers in my electric socks!
Good luck with this and sock it to me baby!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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"Twenty Below with Snow?
In South Jersey I don't think so but if it does happen again I want to put on my electric undies my hand warmers in my electric socks!
Good luck with this and sock it to me baby!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thanks my dear south Jersey soul!