Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "October Morn"A book of Poetry & Writing
150 total reviews
Comment from Dan103085
deepwater, this is great. I can almost see this person hovering above their casket asking these questions. The flow was nice and I enjoyed the font and color, it added to the dreary feeling. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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deepwater, this is great. I can almost see this person hovering above their casket asking these questions. The flow was nice and I enjoyed the font and color, it added to the dreary feeling. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you Dan for the welcome comments
Comment from Nerdette
When I read this, it makes me feel like I am being handed down some great wisdom. The second to last line especially stood out to me, "My family I leave with examples to lead or given advice as to follow." It reminds me of what my mother says, that her mistakes are for me to learn from before I make them. I really enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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When I read this, it makes me feel like I am being handed down some great wisdom. The second to last line especially stood out to me, "My family I leave with examples to lead or given advice as to follow." It reminds me of what my mother says, that her mistakes are for me to learn from before I make them. I really enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you Nerdette
Comment from prophetess
This is an excellently written poem, which makes me think of my own mortality, at a time in my life when my mortality may be breathing down my neck. What will I leave my children when I'm gone? Have i done all I can? Many questions to ponder. Good job.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is an excellently written poem, which makes me think of my own mortality, at a time in my life when my mortality may be breathing down my neck. What will I leave my children when I'm gone? Have i done all I can? Many questions to ponder. Good job.
Prophetess
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thanks for reading prophetess
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You're welcome
Comment from NadiaScrieva
I'm not sure about the punctuation mark after "morn" but other than that I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. It is an excellent musing into an intimate place, and you employ repetition well along with much beautiful rhetoric.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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I'm not sure about the punctuation mark after "morn" but other than that I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. It is an excellent musing into an intimate place, and you employ repetition well along with much beautiful rhetoric.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from Donaya Haymond
A haunting poem, full of the well-described chill of the morning but also warmth of the human spirit. October has long been my favorite month.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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A haunting poem, full of the well-described chill of the morning but also warmth of the human spirit. October has long been my favorite month.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review Donaya
Comment from stephenie khan
It is hard to let go of life...when you both have regrets and times of glory...what we have accomplished in this life when it is time to say goodbye...I question my legacy now...very nice poem
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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It is hard to let go of life...when you both have regrets and times of glory...what we have accomplished in this life when it is time to say goodbye...I question my legacy now...very nice poem
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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thank you Stephenie
Comment from DrJane
Dear Deepwater: This is a poignant, beautiful poem about reviewing life as we look back. I think all of us would like to believe that we made a difference to someone. You have certainly done that through your thoughtful poetry. Artwork is a lovely match.
Blessings,
Jane
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Dear Deepwater: This is a poignant, beautiful poem about reviewing life as we look back. I think all of us would like to believe that we made a difference to someone. You have certainly done that through your thoughtful poetry. Artwork is a lovely match.
Blessings,
Jane
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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thank you Dr J
Comment from tspencer
Well what can I say.
This was heartfelt, moving and Beautifully written.
Great imagery and interesting pairing of words.
Keep up the good work! Thank you so much for writing such a lyrical poem.
tspencer
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Well what can I say.
This was heartfelt, moving and Beautifully written.
Great imagery and interesting pairing of words.
Keep up the good work! Thank you so much for writing such a lyrical poem.
tspencer
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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your very welcome and thank you for the 6 star review
Comment from jadapenn
This is rather a sad reflection on life, your choices and outcomes. One can only do the best on the day you do it. It might be right, it might be wrong in hindsight, but it was your best choice of the day. I love the song "I did it my way". I do not want to follow those before, I want to do it my way and make my own mistakes. But I loved your thoughts here, Deepwater. Thanks for sharing. luv jada
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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This is rather a sad reflection on life, your choices and outcomes. One can only do the best on the day you do it. It might be right, it might be wrong in hindsight, but it was your best choice of the day. I love the song "I did it my way". I do not want to follow those before, I want to do it my way and make my own mistakes. But I loved your thoughts here, Deepwater. Thanks for sharing. luv jada
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading Jada
Comment from Addy García
Congratulations, this line Deepwater mention a great truth that we must never forget:
"My world one dream, I saw life without knowing if there was a tomorrow"
That's life is a dream that awakens us to a reality, and nobody knows if tomorrow it will have to live every day.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Congratulations, this line Deepwater mention a great truth that we must never forget:
"My world one dream, I saw life without knowing if there was a tomorrow"
That's life is a dream that awakens us to a reality, and nobody knows if tomorrow it will have to live every day.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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thank you Addy for the review and comments