Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Chapter 6 Part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
You made Joe and Sara's love making beautiful. Not once did it read like smut as so many do. You did it with grace and skill. Also I didn't think the story too long and was even sorry when it ended. Another most fine chapter. When is your surgery...I need to pray a little harder on that day....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hi Barbara,
You made Joe and Sara's love making beautiful. Not once did it read like smut as so many do. You did it with grace and skill. Also I didn't think the story too long and was even sorry when it ended. Another most fine chapter. When is your surgery...I need to pray a little harder on that day....blessings, chey
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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My sugery is Sept 16th. I plan on posting a cancer essay next weekend, and I am going to try to post the continuation of this one, but we shall see. I hate to leave them in bed for two weeks. Thank you for your kind review.
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I am going to New York on the 14th and home on the 20th. I hope I will have the use of a computer...don't want to miss anything you write! I shall pray...chey
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Thank you for your prayers. The prayers of my friends are giving me the strength to fight this.
Comment from bowls
How beautifully you've written this! It is so soft and gentle and so in keeping with the characters you've developed from the outset. Your posts never disappoint. They are always something to look forward to and, when they arrive, to enjoy thoroughly. I'm already anticipating the next. All the best to you.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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How beautifully you've written this! It is so soft and gentle and so in keeping with the characters you've developed from the outset. Your posts never disappoint. They are always something to look forward to and, when they arrive, to enjoy thoroughly. I'm already anticipating the next. All the best to you.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from LadyWave
Very beautifully written! I could feel their love and their passion as they took this next step. I'm excited to see where things will lead from here!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Very beautifully written! I could feel their love and their passion as they took this next step. I'm excited to see where things will lead from here!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Your love scene is very sesitive and shows the love and fears each has for the other. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Your love scene is very sesitive and shows the love and fears each has for the other. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
put his arms around his shoulders clicked - and clicked
When she felt the bra, closures - drop the comma
Unbuttoning her blouse, their lips locked - you have a dangling participle, a modifier without a person for it to modify.
She moaned, spreading her legs - add comma
This is a wonderful chapter, Barbara. From the passion of their lovemaking to the tenderness of Joe's comments about Cassie, this is all just so beautifully expressive. Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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put his arms around his shoulders clicked - and clicked
When she felt the bra, closures - drop the comma
Unbuttoning her blouse, their lips locked - you have a dangling participle, a modifier without a person for it to modify.
She moaned, spreading her legs - add comma
This is a wonderful chapter, Barbara. From the passion of their lovemaking to the tenderness of Joe's comments about Cassie, this is all just so beautifully expressive. Brooke
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your support. I am so glad you have my back. I am making those corrections.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, i enjoyed reading your chapter about them making love, but you did a great job with it being sensual without it being overt. i pray your other surgery goes well. i want you to have a full recovery.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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this is very well written, i enjoyed reading your chapter about them making love, but you did a great job with it being sensual without it being overt. i pray your other surgery goes well. i want you to have a full recovery.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate the kind review.