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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from K. L. Bauman
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Another great chapter. You still write amazingly well for all that you've been through--or is it all that you've been through that helps you keep writing? Can't wait to see what happens next.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Dave M
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Barbara,

This is an exceptional chapter. So Joe and Sara are much in love, but something's obviously happened to Cassie. I'll find out what next time you get to post something. Good luck with your surgery.

I couldn't find anything in this chapter to criticize.

Dave

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    Thank you Dave, for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Rama Rao
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Another excellent but short chapter which held my interest and made fascinating reading. I've no words to express my admiration for you. Even after a surgery you could post this chapter. If I were you, I'd put everything aside and relax with a book and good music in bed for a week. You obviously are made of sterner stuff.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    My surgery isn't until Thursday. I plan on taking two weeks off work. I can't promise I post next weekend, We will see how I feel.
Comment from bhogg
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Hi Barbara - this was a great post. You shared a beautiful love story between your two main characters, and then what did you do you rat? You created all sorts of tension and have me wondering about Cassie. LOL Bill

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    You know those teenage daughters, they can get themselves into trouble. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by bhogg on 12-Sep-2010
    Barbara - take a look at my photo sometimes. With three boys and two girls, it wasn't the boys that caused me to lose my hair!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    I figured not. Having all boys I don't have a clue how to raise girls, but my friends who have had both say they will take boys over girls any time. My boys,although very active watch over their mom very carefully.
Comment from bowls
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I promise to wait until you post the next episode. This was a beautiful chapter. Once again, you've revealed the characters well and your dialogue is outstanding. You've brought them to a wonderful point in their relationship, and now it looks like a crisis is brewing. You've created a strong feeling of suspense just at the end.
Good luck next week!

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from CameoRenae
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A well written chapter. I enjoyed reading it, and it kept my attention throughout. I hope that Cassie is alright. I can't wait to read the next.
Warm wishes your way, for a speedy recovery! :)

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
chapter fifteen of 'Another Pretty' face is very well written and a thoroughly enjoyable read. You're top on you game writing this romance despite all the crap you are going through. I enjoyed it so much I read it twice. I was waiting for the other shoe to drop and at the end when Cassie didn't come home, then Sara became concerned. Why do I have a feeling it's something bad? Your after loving conversation is natural. I'm in love with Joe, he's such a sweet man. Joe better trust her mother's intuition. I have a feeling her disappearance has something to do with the computer because in chapter thirteen you mentioned in the chapter that Cassie we to check on her computer and then she came back telling her mother she was meeting her friend Angela at her house around four and then they were going to get hamburgers an half hour later. As for posting the next chapter it's good to leave us hanging because you need to concentrate on yourself. Thanks for sharing you talented pen with us here on fanstory, we're not worthy, my friend. Prayers and kisses to you. . .Melissa.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    It is something bad, your instints are correct. Thank you for your reveiw and friendship.
reply by missy98writer on 12-Sep-2010
    You are so very welcomed, my dear.
    Melissa.
Comment from dmjones
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It's good to leave it in a bad place. It leaves the reader eager for more. This is really good and I do like the whole suspense at the end. I'm worried about Cassie. I didn't see any spag. Really well done.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    I didn't intentionally leave it in this spot. It's just the way the pages fell. I wrote this about 5 years ago. It takes me that long to edit.
Comment from anabelle
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Really good chapter, Barbara. I hope there's nothing wrong with Cassie? I'm thrilled Sara and Joe have gotten together.

Thanks for the good read.

Regards, anabelle

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from chells36
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This is a very well written and lovely piece of writing that fully deserves the stars given
I would however put a warning of sexual content on it
Thanks for a great read xx

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
    I will put a sexual content warning on it. Thank you for your kind review.