Another Pretty Face
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Comment from jmdg1954
Another good chapter where things are about to come together then other doors or questions open up. The cyberspace phenomena has now crept into your story giving us another twist. Keep up the good writing to the story as it has now developed more then a romance... John
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Another good chapter where things are about to come together then other doors or questions open up. The cyberspace phenomena has now crept into your story giving us another twist. Keep up the good writing to the story as it has now developed more then a romance... John
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
hey, i'm sorry you are having problems with your computer. i enjoyed reading this chapter and drawing the other team members in like a family. i pray your computer gets fixed soon and your chemo goes well with no problems
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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hey, i'm sorry you are having problems with your computer. i enjoyed reading this chapter and drawing the other team members in like a family. i pray your computer gets fixed soon and your chemo goes well with no problems
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate the kind review and continued support.
Comment from c_lucas
Cyberspace has created a whole new set of problems for parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Cyberspace has created a whole new set of problems for parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
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You;re welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, what a dilemma. I can see and feel the reasoning behind Sara's worry about Joe hurting them. We hear about people not being able to control their anger. Hopefully in this case, Joe is right about him being able to control and never harm them. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Barbara, what a dilemma. I can see and feel the reasoning behind Sara's worry about Joe hurting them. We hear about people not being able to control their anger. Hopefully in this case, Joe is right about him being able to control and never harm them. Keep writing.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Many of the families of our deployed soldiers are finding out the hard way.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Some people don't understand there's a time for violence. It looks like Joe is going to have to rescue Sara, or Cassie, before Sara learns that.
She turned toward him[] while waiting for it to boot-up.
"You know[,] if it was me in the same situation[,] you wouldn't leave my side until you felt the babies and I were safe."
"You're right, but in certain situations[,] we make exceptions. This is one of those occasions."
"The real reason is[,] when we joined the Task Force[,] we pledged our allegiance to the United States, and then to come to the aid of beautiful women."
Good luck with your chemo.
Roberta
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Some people don't understand there's a time for violence. It looks like Joe is going to have to rescue Sara, or Cassie, before Sara learns that.
She turned toward him[] while waiting for it to boot-up.
"You know[,] if it was me in the same situation[,] you wouldn't leave my side until you felt the babies and I were safe."
"You're right, but in certain situations[,] we make exceptions. This is one of those occasions."
"The real reason is[,] when we joined the Task Force[,] we pledged our allegiance to the United States, and then to come to the aid of beautiful women."
Good luck with your chemo.
Roberta
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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I will be off taking care of all those commas. I have I mentioned to you how I hate commas? Thank you for dropping by.
Comment from bowls
Continued good wishes to you.
I like the fact that you're showing the human side of the team in an effort, I suppose, to convince the reader that Sara has nothing to fear from Joe. Hopefully, she will come around to that way of thinking. Cassie's fate is first and foremost the concern of this chapter. You do a good job of intensifying the suspense by not divulging much, but mentioning the car and the computer information. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Continued good wishes to you.
I like the fact that you're showing the human side of the team in an effort, I suppose, to convince the reader that Sara has nothing to fear from Joe. Hopefully, she will come around to that way of thinking. Cassie's fate is first and foremost the concern of this chapter. You do a good job of intensifying the suspense by not divulging much, but mentioning the car and the computer information. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your insight.
Comment from jclark
Another good chapter but I have one question. Matt & Dani are married so the reference to "my" six month old daughter and when Matt refers to the baby as "your" daughter threw me off. I went back to read the part that said they were married. Not a big deal; just wondering. I think you did a really good job of getting inside Sara's head with her reaction to seeing such violence in her own home. I thought about that and wondered how I might react under similar circumstances. I think we have become so jaded to violence from TV and movies, that you were wise to give Sara another dimension to reflect those feelings.
I am excited and nervous to see what's next.
Judy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Another good chapter but I have one question. Matt & Dani are married so the reference to "my" six month old daughter and when Matt refers to the baby as "your" daughter threw me off. I went back to read the part that said they were married. Not a big deal; just wondering. I think you did a really good job of getting inside Sara's head with her reaction to seeing such violence in her own home. I thought about that and wondered how I might react under similar circumstances. I think we have become so jaded to violence from TV and movies, that you were wise to give Sara another dimension to reflect those feelings.
I am excited and nervous to see what's next.
Judy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your insight. Some reviewers think she's wrong in her feelings about the violence.
Comment from animatqua
I like the way you are introducing the members of the task force here. It very much brings both their humanity and normalcy into light. I also like the explanations of why Sara is afraid of Joe.
One thing you might consider playing on in this explanation. Sara was a victim of a violent act. This, plus the pain she suffered so long from it, would make her naturally terrified of violence, especially from someone she loved.
I don't imagine that rape has ever been far from her mind even after so many years. This would be a good place to emphasize this, because it would do several things. First, it would help define her character, especially the way she stood back and allowed the people of the town to persecute her. Second, it would explain both her reticence to get involved with Joe, and her fear of his violence.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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I like the way you are introducing the members of the task force here. It very much brings both their humanity and normalcy into light. I also like the explanations of why Sara is afraid of Joe.
One thing you might consider playing on in this explanation. Sara was a victim of a violent act. This, plus the pain she suffered so long from it, would make her naturally terrified of violence, especially from someone she loved.
I don't imagine that rape has ever been far from her mind even after so many years. This would be a good place to emphasize this, because it would do several things. First, it would help define her character, especially the way she stood back and allowed the people of the town to persecute her. Second, it would explain both her reticence to get involved with Joe, and her fear of his violence.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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I will consider that. Sara didn't view her date rape as a date rape until Joe told her it was. She blamed herself all those years.
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You brought out that aspect very well. Still, the violence has to be a subliminal fear if nothing else. Surely there was horror in it, one that neither the body or the mind would forget.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I'm glad my prayers are being heard for you. I'm happy you are doing much better. Your latest chapter of 'Another Pretty Face' is wonderfully written. Your dialogue is excellent and your narrative is great. Cool art work you used. What's wrong with Sara doubting Joe, I'm sure it's the stress of her daughter missing. I was correct assuming Cassie had met someone on the computer who claimed to be a fifteen year old boy. I'm fearful for Cassie what this freak will do to her. Rape, torture or whatever. I look forward to your next chapter. You did a terrific job writing chapter eighteen. I just posted Saturday's flower poem and I'm sure you'll enjoy the song I used by Johnny Rivers. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend. As for you computer I'd get a sledge hammer and smash it! I just got the new computer I bought for Brandon & the family. I put the old one in the front room on a desk and I'm using it. The computer a Gateway and is over five years old, but it chugging along.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Barbara,
I'm glad my prayers are being heard for you. I'm happy you are doing much better. Your latest chapter of 'Another Pretty Face' is wonderfully written. Your dialogue is excellent and your narrative is great. Cool art work you used. What's wrong with Sara doubting Joe, I'm sure it's the stress of her daughter missing. I was correct assuming Cassie had met someone on the computer who claimed to be a fifteen year old boy. I'm fearful for Cassie what this freak will do to her. Rape, torture or whatever. I look forward to your next chapter. You did a terrific job writing chapter eighteen. I just posted Saturday's flower poem and I'm sure you'll enjoy the song I used by Johnny Rivers. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend. As for you computer I'd get a sledge hammer and smash it! I just got the new computer I bought for Brandon & the family. I put the old one in the front room on a desk and I'm using it. The computer a Gateway and is over five years old, but it chugging along.
Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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My Dell is about about 5 years old. I am sitting trying to remember when we got it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from janeae
I know that you are going through a lot physically, but I am so anxious to read the next chapter or part of chapter. You are writing an interesting and wonderful story for all of us...thank you so much for writing . jane
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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I know that you are going through a lot physically, but I am so anxious to read the next chapter or part of chapter. You are writing an interesting and wonderful story for all of us...thank you so much for writing . jane
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.