Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Part one, Chapter 9"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter in your book, the things everyone is doing to get anna settled into her abuse free life. i enjoyed reading this, look forward to the next chapter, teach....
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter in your book, the things everyone is doing to get anna settled into her abuse free life. i enjoyed reading this, look forward to the next chapter, teach....
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janie King
mechanical..technical things with computers makes me crazy..I never can figure them out..this is a well-written cchapter but I worry, as Anna does, about what's going to happen when this guy gets out of jail, or what might his mother do..oh dear. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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mechanical..technical things with computers makes me crazy..I never can figure them out..this is a well-written cchapter but I worry, as Anna does, about what's going to happen when this guy gets out of jail, or what might his mother do..oh dear. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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There are many things to worry about and Anna is correct in not being too comfortable. I hate computers, but must use them all the time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent dialogue throughout that sounds natural and expresses the emotions of the speakers well
You explain in good detail all the things it takes to start life all over, from cash for groceries to linens for a bed - it is not as easy as some people think when they say about abused women, "Why didn't she just walk out?"
You also explain well her constant worry that her husband will track her down to harm her and that he might even fight for custody. Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Excellent dialogue throughout that sounds natural and expresses the emotions of the speakers well
You explain in good detail all the things it takes to start life all over, from cash for groceries to linens for a bed - it is not as easy as some people think when they say about abused women, "Why didn't she just walk out?"
You also explain well her constant worry that her husband will track her down to harm her and that he might even fight for custody. Brooke
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I worry about the day to day stuff being boring, but I feel it's important and needs to be there. Thank you for the kind review.
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No novel can have chase scenes and beatings and high drama on every page - especially a novel about real life and not an alien attack from outer space. LOL
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I thought evil eddie had been playing you up with the font... still, it's easier enough to read... a very
natural scene you paint with your words.
Look(,) the petals
When you're ready, come on [it](in)
Other things might pop up we haven't thought about..
other things we haven't thought of, might pop up. -- what do you think?? Just ignore if not in agreement.
Most enjoyable.
Margaret
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I thought evil eddie had been playing you up with the font... still, it's easier enough to read... a very
natural scene you paint with your words.
Look(,) the petals
When you're ready, come on [it](in)
Other things might pop up we haven't thought about..
other things we haven't thought of, might pop up. -- what do you think?? Just ignore if not in agreement.
Most enjoyable.
Margaret
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I didn't like the pop up sentence, but my mind went blank and I couldn't figure out how to fix it. Thank you for fixing it for me. I appreciate your help. I have asked Tom's help on the font.
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Often, when I can't get something quite how I want it, it seems someone else can see the correct way at once... and then I wonder... why didn't I think of that!!
M
Comment from Shirley McLain
As long as I can read this story, I'm not worried about the font. This is so good and I can't wait to read more. About how many chapters do you have left to write?
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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As long as I can read this story, I'm not worried about the font. This is so good and I can't wait to read more. About how many chapters do you have left to write?
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I am just a little under half way done with the novel. There's plenty of excitement left. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
I am sure Anna is overwhelmed by all the kindness. It's a shame all the battered women don't have that kind of support. Even with all of that, though, Bobby can still be a big problem. Now, his mother will be one, too. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I am sure Anna is overwhelmed by all the kindness. It's a shame all the battered women don't have that kind of support. Even with all of that, though, Bobby can still be a big problem. Now, his mother will be one, too. Great chapter.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Sorry about the small font. I have asked Tom for help.
Comment from mumsyone
I can't blame Anna for thinking this family is too good to be true. It would be nice if more people were that way.
saw the concern written acrossed (across) her face and put his arms around her.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I can't blame Anna for thinking this family is too good to be true. It would be nice if more people were that way.
saw the concern written acrossed (across) her face and put his arms around her.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I will fix that. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
It looks like Anna has picked up surrogate parents and is fitting nicely into the family. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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It looks like Anna has picked up surrogate parents and is fitting nicely into the family. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Still great work here. True to the plot and your characters are still engaging. I only wish it were that easy for most woman who have to live through this....
Loved it as always didn't see anything needing work on.
Well done
Maureen
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Still great work here. True to the plot and your characters are still engaging. I only wish it were that easy for most woman who have to live through this....
Loved it as always didn't see anything needing work on.
Well done
Maureen
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I know, but it is fiction. I hope to get across everything that women need to go through. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Another excellent write here old sport.
Your story is intriguing and I look forward to each post.
Well done with another splendid write here ma'am
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Another excellent write here old sport.
Your story is intriguing and I look forward to each post.
Well done with another splendid write here ma'am
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.