Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from ScarletClearwater
My rating may change after I read more of the chapters. I felt like the chapter moved a little too quickly without enough emotion. It seems like it should have been a very emotional time. The premise is interesting and I'll be reading on.
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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My rating may change after I read more of the chapters. I felt like the chapter moved a little too quickly without enough emotion. It seems like it should have been a very emotional time. The premise is interesting and I'll be reading on.
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Barbara, I agree that two trials would be too much. I like the way you skipped along without bringing out every little detail, letting the reader do a little bit of imagining.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Barbara, I agree that two trials would be too much. I like the way you skipped along without bringing out every little detail, letting the reader do a little bit of imagining.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kiind review and your suggestion about the trail. I have only had one person tell me I should have included the trail.
Comment from rudion
Outstanding. The more I read of this story, the more I want to. It's a very compelling story about a very serious matter. I enjoy all the twists and turns and romance you put in as a bonus.
Rudion
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Outstanding. The more I read of this story, the more I want to. It's a very compelling story about a very serious matter. I enjoy all the twists and turns and romance you put in as a bonus.
Rudion
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from samsaysagain
Excellent. A fast moving chapter with a lot of action to keep the reader on his toes. I applaud your ineres in and support of action against domestic violence, Too many people are hiding behind fake smiles out of fear. Thank you,
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Excellent. A fast moving chapter with a lot of action to keep the reader on his toes. I applaud your ineres in and support of action against domestic violence, Too many people are hiding behind fake smiles out of fear. Thank you,
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Your welcome. Night now.
Comment from kiwisteveh
great decision to skip the details of this trial and just fill in the necessary details in retrospect. That works really well for me.
I guess the relationship between Troy and Anna may come back to haunt them yet - ridiculous law if you ask me...
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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great decision to skip the details of this trial and just fill in the necessary details in retrospect. That works really well for me.
I guess the relationship between Troy and Anna may come back to haunt them yet - ridiculous law if you ask me...
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your comment on the trials.
Comment from HAWordsmith
Wow...it has been awhile since I have read, and I had almost forgotten how nice it is to read something through without having to note SPAG. This is well-written, as usual, realistic and authentic, you do well in making the reader feel the story, the characters plight, ie sympathy and anger for Anna and what she is going through, dislike of this Mrs. Rodgers (haven't read other chapters yet, so not sure who she is, but I already don't like her), the plot is constantly moving and checking. This was a pleasure to read, and I look forward to going back and catching up. Thank you for the post and many blessings.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Wow...it has been awhile since I have read, and I had almost forgotten how nice it is to read something through without having to note SPAG. This is well-written, as usual, realistic and authentic, you do well in making the reader feel the story, the characters plight, ie sympathy and anger for Anna and what she is going through, dislike of this Mrs. Rodgers (haven't read other chapters yet, so not sure who she is, but I already don't like her), the plot is constantly moving and checking. This was a pleasure to read, and I look forward to going back and catching up. Thank you for the post and many blessings.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I wondered why there wasn't more written about the trial but when I read your notes I understand why. I hope the PI can't find anything to accuse Anna of doing. She seems lily white but she could have forgotten even the smallest of things. I am afraid Mrs.Rodgers is going to be a real problem but I hope Paul can find away around it if it does happen. Great chapter! Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Barbara,
I wondered why there wasn't more written about the trial but when I read your notes I understand why. I hope the PI can't find anything to accuse Anna of doing. She seems lily white but she could have forgotten even the smallest of things. I am afraid Mrs.Rodgers is going to be a real problem but I hope Paul can find away around it if it does happen. Great chapter! Blessings, chey
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Violet Demise
Very interesting chapter and I definitely agree with you that describing two trials (especially if one after another)would be kind of pointless.
Keep up the great work,
Ivana
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Very interesting chapter and I definitely agree with you that describing two trials (especially if one after another)would be kind of pointless.
Keep up the great work,
Ivana
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. The vote is now 4 - 1 in favor of the way I handled it.
Comment from axelbeariter
"If eyes were daggers, I'd be dead."/nice and very appropriate---- Paul tossled Michael's hair./tossled should read tousled----I decided not to go into the trial because the divorce trial is next. I felt 2 trials were too much./A wise decision--Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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"If eyes were daggers, I'd be dead."/nice and very appropriate---- Paul tossled Michael's hair./tossled should read tousled----I decided not to go into the trial because the divorce trial is next. I felt 2 trials were too much./A wise decision--Another great chapter.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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I will fix tousled. I don't know what I was thinking. The vote is 3 - 1 in favor of how I decided to handle it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
You decided to just touch on the abuse trial because the divorce trial was next is that what you mean? She certainly should be awarded a divorce and custody of the child. Her mother-in-law is really somethinng else. Her son can do nothing wrong as far as she is concerned. This is well written chapter, Barbara.
April
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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You decided to just touch on the abuse trial because the divorce trial was next is that what you mean? She certainly should be awarded a divorce and custody of the child. Her mother-in-law is really somethinng else. Her son can do nothing wrong as far as she is concerned. This is well written chapter, Barbara.
April
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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In this post I simply mentioned the abuse trial happened and what the verdict was. In my next post I will actually have some of the divorce trial in the writing. Thank you for the kind review.