Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Gungalo
If her parents know about it and he is surprising her with it, it must be an apartment of her very own. Only how can she afford it? Perhaps he is going to help!!
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If her parents know about it and he is surprising her with it, it must be an apartment of her very own. Only how can she afford it? Perhaps he is going to help!!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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She has her own apartment. In an early post I discussed finances. Thank you for the kind review.
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She has her own apartment. In an early post I discussed finances. Thank you for the kind review.
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I must have missed that one. Drat!!
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
He's going to propose isn't he? This has been an excellent story Barbara. I look forward to the next chapter,and more of the same.
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He's going to propose isn't he? This has been an excellent story Barbara. I look forward to the next chapter,and more of the same.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and your wonderings.
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Thank you for the kind review and your wonderings.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter for your book and the picnic anna and troy went on, now you left us with a mystery of is it his house that he took her to.
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this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter for your book and the picnic anna and troy went on, now you left us with a mystery of is it his house that he took her to.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janie King
I can understand why she's afraid even though the guy is in prison..his mother lurks in the shadows...but maybe they arrested her too. This is a good chapter..now where is Troy taking Here...hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. God bless.
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I can understand why she's afraid even though the guy is in prison..his mother lurks in the shadows...but maybe they arrested her too. This is a good chapter..now where is Troy taking Here...hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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Bobby's mom is in jail too.
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Bobby's mom is in jail too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Hi, Barbara. Nice snappy dialogue in this that moves the story right along. Also aids with characterization. We see that Anna still worries about threats from her ex-husband, which is understandable. Troy seems to be a good guy, and you leave us wondering what surprise he has in store for Anna. A pleasure to read. judi
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Hi, Barbara. Nice snappy dialogue in this that moves the story right along. Also aids with characterization. We see that Anna still worries about threats from her ex-husband, which is understandable. Troy seems to be a good guy, and you leave us wondering what surprise he has in store for Anna. A pleasure to read. judi
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're quite welcome, barbara. I'm glad I'm now alerted to all of your posts. judi
Comment from RebelRose
Another great chapter with good dialogue and story line. I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing this and look forward to next chapter.
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Another great chapter with good dialogue and story line. I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing this and look forward to next chapter.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Deejharrington
Though its been a while since I've had the chance to catch up with your story, your easy style put me right back in the plot. The way Anna jumped at the sound of the car engine and how she hesitates in trusting any man wonderful illustrated how an past victim of abuse would react. I am anxious to read what I've missed.
deb
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Though its been a while since I've had the chance to catch up with your story, your easy style put me right back in the plot. The way Anna jumped at the sound of the car engine and how she hesitates in trusting any man wonderful illustrated how an past victim of abuse would react. I am anxious to read what I've missed.
deb
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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You're very welcome
deb
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This is another wonderful, romantic chapter. Unfortunately, Anna seems about to blow her relationship out of fears left over from her abusive marriage.
It is good that most of her experiences with Troy and his family have been pleasant and exude love for Anna and Michael. I think the power of romantic attraction will soon heal Anna's deep seated fears. Let the healing begin.
I have only one minor suggestion: Troy parked outside [of] an older four-story red brick building. {I suggest you delete the word 'of' for better flow.}
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
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Hi Barbara:)
This is another wonderful, romantic chapter. Unfortunately, Anna seems about to blow her relationship out of fears left over from her abusive marriage.
It is good that most of her experiences with Troy and his family have been pleasant and exude love for Anna and Michael. I think the power of romantic attraction will soon heal Anna's deep seated fears. Let the healing begin.
I have only one minor suggestion: Troy parked outside [of] an older four-story red brick building. {I suggest you delete the word 'of' for better flow.}
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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I will omit that pesky little word. I appreciate your eagle eye.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I can guess we can see where this is heading - I can only agree with your notes about taking it slowly and just add my own observation that the effects of abuse can be very longterm and can crop up in unexpected ways many years after the traumatic events have finished - wouldn't do for the book though to have Troy and Anna get divorced 20 years down the track because she still suffers anxiety/depression etc.....
I look forward to a happier conclusion here...
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I can guess we can see where this is heading - I can only agree with your notes about taking it slowly and just add my own observation that the effects of abuse can be very longterm and can crop up in unexpected ways many years after the traumatic events have finished - wouldn't do for the book though to have Troy and Anna get divorced 20 years down the track because she still suffers anxiety/depression etc.....
I look forward to a happier conclusion here...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
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I am hoping to take their romance slow enough to be authentic, but fast enough to keep my readers, it's a tight line. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb you are so good leading us on with your thoughts of how I feel Anna and Troy are starting to (get in the romance mood) plus you've done it again leaving a question stuck into our minds at the end of this chapter.
Gert
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Hello Barb you are so good leading us on with your thoughts of how I feel Anna and Troy are starting to (get in the romance mood) plus you've done it again leaving a question stuck into our minds at the end of this chapter.
Gert
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
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You are welcome
Gert