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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Barbara,

I wonder if it is Bobby's mother who left the threatening note? If Bobby is still in jail maybe he is paying someone on the outside to scare Anna. I can't imagine how Troy's medical records ended up on the internet. It would have to be someone who works in the same place they are. Oh dear, too many questions and I hope we will soon know the answers. Good writing here....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review. Remember Troy's office was broke into and his records were stolen.
reply by cheyennewy on 05-Feb-2012
    Oh yes, now I remember. Thanks for reminding me!
Comment from Nanette Mary
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Hullo Barbara ...

This is another short but very informative chapter of your book, reflecting the terrifying events that are taking place in Anna's life and the disturbing memories that are surfacing for Troy.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, of course, I now look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
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Another good chapter, Barbara. Thanks for the author notes; I hadn't read about Troy's mother getting beaten until now.

"Oh." Ann (Anna) studied at (omit 'at') her feet for a moment, then leaned over the hood of the car and removed the paper.
Tell Betty,(no comma) I'll be right there.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    I have made those corrections. I appreciate your eagle eye.
Comment from Janie King
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You know, I can't remember where I came in on this story, but its been a while back but I did miss the part that he's adopted and his mother had been killed by spousal abuse. This is fiction but the sad part is that this is true for many people. God bless.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and the support.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Barb
to me it looks like some of your characters are letting their skeletons out of their closets and stating to let others know their hidden fears
You must be leading to something big?

Gert

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    I am. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 05-Feb-2012
    You are welcome
    Take care.

    Gert
Comment from adewpearl
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Excellent natural-sounding dialogue throughout as you effectively continue to build suspense about the person harassing Anna and that loud muffler that seems to be everywhere/
I can feel Anna's guilt at the emotional turmoil she is causing Troy. Brooke

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    Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from axelbeariter
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I assume this is a partial setup for the rest of the chapter. So far, the writing is as terrific as usual even though the action is sparse. You are setting this up well for more intrigue to follow.----Betty is Troy's adoptive mother. The mother getting beaten died from spousal abuse that Troy witnessed. This was established at the beginning of the novel. I'm glad you added this, since I wasn't active in FS when you first posted it. Well done. I look forward to the next installment.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where everybody is facing their demons of the past. i enjoyed reading it and hope all find their own happiness soon.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rashi kumar
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Another wonderful addition to this,
very well-written indeed.
Anna is so prepared to fight against the wrong,
her tragic life has not curbed her zeal yet.
Very well-done!
Keep sharing!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


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    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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There seem to be an endless round of problems for Anna, what with her tire being slashed and then the threatening note. Her ex and his family would been the logical ones behind it but they surely know they're under scrutiny. Is there someone else wishing to harm her--interesting question. At least she's fighting back by bringing the police in. Interesting that Troy's medical records popped up on the Internet. Great work keeping the suspense going. judi

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.