Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "part three, Chapter 20"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from jaeladarling
Waiting for Anna's eyes to open for good! :) You've got a good hook in this chapter, and the story is coming along nicely. And if I didn't say it before, thanks for sharing the Domestic Violence hotline in your Author Notes. Who knows how many lives might be saved? :)
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Waiting for Anna's eyes to open for good! :) You've got a good hook in this chapter, and the story is coming along nicely. And if I didn't say it before, thanks for sharing the Domestic Violence hotline in your Author Notes. Who knows how many lives might be saved? :)
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I hope my story can help one woman, if it does, it's worth it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Magnificent and heartwarming story of Anna's being on the road to recovery. Leave it to the Indian blankets and Michael to work their magic. This portion is well written and everything is convincing. The dialogue works well in helping move the story along. The real-life incident you describe in your notes is very appealing, and such stories lead one to believe in the power of love to bring a person back. judi
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Magnificent and heartwarming story of Anna's being on the road to recovery. Leave it to the Indian blankets and Michael to work their magic. This portion is well written and everything is convincing. The dialogue works well in helping move the story along. The real-life incident you describe in your notes is very appealing, and such stories lead one to believe in the power of love to bring a person back. judi
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I felt there would be non-believers so I thought I needed a real life story. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome! judi
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. I was glad to find another one for review.
Troy turned off the overhead light before he turned on the wall light away from Anna's bed(,) dimming the room lighting.
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Good chapter, Barbara. I was glad to find another one for review.
Troy turned off the overhead light before he turned on the wall light away from Anna's bed(,) dimming the room lighting.
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I struggle with comma's thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from inkedone
Because I havn't read the previous parts of this story it makes it hard to review on content. However, the writing is really well done and your characters are very believable.
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Because I havn't read the previous parts of this story it makes it hard to review on content. However, the writing is really well done and your characters are very believable.
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Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from RebelRose
Anna opened her [eyed], then closed them...[eyes]
Another great chapter and one we have all been waiting for. There is no match for a mother's love for her child.
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Anna opened her [eyed], then closed them...[eyes]
Another great chapter and one we have all been waiting for. There is no match for a mother's love for her child.
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While I searched for this error to correct, I found another one. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb each time you said that Anna opened her eyes I thought she was responding, which gave me a feeling of happiness.
Besides when is she going to notice the beautifulblanket of various colored roses?
Yes GREAT chapter.
Gert
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Hi Barb each time you said that Anna opened her eyes I thought she was responding, which gave me a feeling of happiness.
Besides when is she going to notice the beautifulblanket of various colored roses?
Yes GREAT chapter.
Gert
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from WilliamDeen
little short, Barbara. You left me wanting to read more! Good work and well done. A good addition to the story. Thanks for sharing. billy
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little short, Barbara. You left me wanting to read more! Good work and well done. A good addition to the story. Thanks for sharing. billy
Comment Written 20-May-2012
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It's the end of the school year and it's all I can do right now. It has never taken me this long to post an entire novel before. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
I liked the little touches Troy thought of; the roses and Indian blankets. The readers were nicely surprised and given hope again for Anna. I found two spag; "griped his fingers" should be "gripped, "a few year back", should be "a few years". Nice write!
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Dear Barbara,
I liked the little touches Troy thought of; the roses and Indian blankets. The readers were nicely surprised and given hope again for Anna. I found two spag; "griped his fingers" should be "gripped, "a few year back", should be "a few years". Nice write!
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Thank you for catching those for me. I appreciate your help.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very wel lwritten, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where troy fills anna's room with indian blankets and michael continues to reach his mother. i enjoyed reading it.
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this is very wel lwritten, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where troy fills anna's room with indian blankets and michael continues to reach his mother. i enjoyed reading it.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. The bond between mother and child has been known to work miracles. Good job.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. The bond between mother and child has been known to work miracles. Good job.
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Comment Written 20-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie