Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

kiwisteveh,

This was a brilliant write, and so very well written. You did right by Poe. :) A lovely form and I loved the internal rhymes that you used.

It was a very entertaining story from beginning to end. I particularly liked how each stanza would end with statements pertaining to Juliet ... very effective!

I thought it was a clever approach to write it in such a way as to show that he loved her so much and was not aware that he had murdered her.

Best wishes for the contest! This one, hands down, is the best entry I have read todate. I entered the contest too.

Your write is most deserving of at least six stars, but I only have fivers left to dole out.

Thanks for a MOST entertaining read! I loved it!

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Connie, thanks for the great review and the virtual six. I'm glad you enjoyed my little tale... . Of course, he could have been innocent.....

Steve

Comment from amada

Excellent

A entire different take from the works I have read in this popular contest. The lines carry life and horror, a very well stand for the touching artwork.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Nichola

Excellent

I wish that I had six stars to give you. This poem is astounding. It has a beautiful rhythm and flow throughout and has beautiful language. It tells a heart-wrenching story of a murder taken place and a wrongful conviction.

Very well done.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Thanks for the kind words and the virtual six - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the man arrested for killing his lover. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Ah, but did he really kill her???

Thanks for the review.

Steve

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

wow..if poe was a genius...you are following in his footsteps...this is awesome! beautiful in rhyme, and story! thank you for sharing! i am so glad i did not enter this contest...i could never compete with this!

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Thanks, Jo, for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

Wow! I've always loved the poem the Raven and yours is every bit as delightful to read as Poe's poem. Now, I know I don't stand a chance in this contest. This sounds like a winner to me.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Thanks, Beth - you never know what will take the committee's fancy in these site contests - I have learnt never to count my chickens or ravens...

Steve

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

Well now... whew! That was an adventure and a half! So well written and rhymed, it grabbed my attention immediately and grew more and more intense with each passing stanza - well done!

PF

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013

Thanks, PF

yes, I tried to build up the intensity - glad you felt it worked.

Steve

Comment from SteveY

Excellent

Wow, you certainly put some work into this one my friend. And it was very very good. Loved everything about this one. Great story, rhyme, rhythm, perfect.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013

Thanks, Steve.

yes, some effort required, especially with the triple rhyming - now I can't get the damned thing out of my head....

Steve

Comment from emjaihammond

Excellent

If only a six! I love this poem so much! I love the story the rhyme the rhythm and the fact that it was like Poe. Great job on things concerning the writing of it. Loved it.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013

Thanks for the enthusiastic review and the virtual six - let's hope the committee agree with you!

Steve

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

Yes this does read like Poe but If I may it is so much better. Poe who? What you have written is modern day Romeo and Juliet, not unlike the remake but with a more tragic ending. Talent you have.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013

Thank you so much for the kind words and the six shiny stars.

Yes, I chose the name Juliet to echo Shakespeare's tragic heroine and had in mind the tumultuous and whirlwind action in the play.

Steve