Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "The Venus fly trap "A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from missjosi
Lovely rhythm and flow to your poetry........lovely piece of storytelling as well......................................Excellent great work :)
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Lovely rhythm and flow to your poetry........lovely piece of storytelling as well......................................Excellent great work :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Did you mean 'oh sprites', or did you mean, 'owe sprites' as I'm not sure of the meaning of line four. All the same I get the meaning of the poem, a man disappointed in love. Giddy
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Did you mean 'oh sprites', or did you mean, 'owe sprites' as I'm not sure of the meaning of line four. All the same I get the meaning of the poem, a man disappointed in love. Giddy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from emrpoems
good use of alliteration -- so /soft /smooth /springs /summer
He sits at home and blames himself for the things he wished he'd done,--maybe there was something you did that made her leave
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good use of alliteration -- so /soft /smooth /springs /summer
He sits at home and blames himself for the things he wished he'd done,--maybe there was something you did that made her leave
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from MizKat
Hi GW,
This is another nicely written poem that I really enjoyed reading. I'm sure men have done the same thing to women. (:
Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Kat
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Hi GW,
This is another nicely written poem that I really enjoyed reading. I'm sure men have done the same thing to women. (:
Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Kat
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
Married a brown eyed Arkie 56 years ago. Still pretty as ever and her dark brown eyes still shine as yesterday. Thank you for sharing this great poem. My blessings
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Married a brown eyed Arkie 56 years ago. Still pretty as ever and her dark brown eyes still shine as yesterday. Thank you for sharing this great poem. My blessings
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from chasennov
"The Venus fly trap" This is a very fine poem you have created here, and I really enjoyed the message it sends out. Life is just exactly that. We do not appreciate what we have, until it is lost. Well done.
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"The Venus fly trap" This is a very fine poem you have created here, and I really enjoyed the message it sends out. Life is just exactly that. We do not appreciate what we have, until it is lost. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from victor 66
Men are simplistic creatures and their needs and wants quite transparent. Women seem much more complicated and although I love them dearly, I would never suggest any understanding concerning how their minds work. With the situation in the poem, I have no advice just commiseration. Take care.
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Men are simplistic creatures and their needs and wants quite transparent. Women seem much more complicated and although I love them dearly, I would never suggest any understanding concerning how their minds work. With the situation in the poem, I have no advice just commiseration. Take care.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Sefiros
I like it. The picture was a great joke. I especially like the line about the old man being lucky enough to have the narrator in his life. A little sappy, but hey, whatever works. Good job.
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I like it. The picture was a great joke. I especially like the line about the old man being lucky enough to have the narrator in his life. A little sappy, but hey, whatever works. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Karen B.
I love the sadness here, of the love that seemed so perfect at first and then left the writer with just emptiness. Sometimes love just tears the heart to pieces, and your words depict that so well. Good rhyming, great picture, and an enjoyable read.
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I love the sadness here, of the love that seemed so perfect at first and then left the writer with just emptiness. Sometimes love just tears the heart to pieces, and your words depict that so well. Good rhyming, great picture, and an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
This poem captures the very essence of wickedness; one can almost feel the doom pending, and it's ominous tones begin with "the spring of summers...", at least for this reader.
Well-done (and my hope that this poem is fictional, as many of mine are...)
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This poem captures the very essence of wickedness; one can almost feel the doom pending, and it's ominous tones begin with "the spring of summers...", at least for this reader.
Well-done (and my hope that this poem is fictional, as many of mine are...)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014