Free Verse Collection
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72 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Fresh night air
Will cause on to stop
And ponder the feedback
Of his senses.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Fresh night air
Will cause on to stop
And ponder the feedback
Of his senses.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Charlie. Much appreciated. Tony
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You're welcome, Tony. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is such a lovely contest entry. I really enjoyed reading. The flow of this poem was equal to the flow of a hawk moth's flight. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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This is such a lovely contest entry. I really enjoyed reading. The flow of this poem was equal to the flow of a hawk moth's flight. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Barbara, and good luck wishes. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from rama devi
Nice pic!
The air tonight's distilled from jasmine flowers,
a whiff of pheromone.
Witty opening! Made me chuckle. Love the assonance of I and consonance of L, T and S.
Nice alliteration of H and W and C and S here, plus continued consonances and the silky flow of the long sentence style--so finely woven from line to line it rolls off the tongue read aloud:
Hawk moths hover,
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup,
with casual promiscuity,
till lifted by a sultry sigh
to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
on wings of moonlit lace,
idealising love.
Love this portrait:
Hawk moths hover,
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup,
with casual promiscuity,
love this eloquent imagery:
to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
Love moonlit lace and the closing note of LOVE.
Wish I had a six.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Nice pic!
The air tonight's distilled from jasmine flowers,
a whiff of pheromone.
Witty opening! Made me chuckle. Love the assonance of I and consonance of L, T and S.
Nice alliteration of H and W and C and S here, plus continued consonances and the silky flow of the long sentence style--so finely woven from line to line it rolls off the tongue read aloud:
Hawk moths hover,
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup,
with casual promiscuity,
till lifted by a sultry sigh
to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
on wings of moonlit lace,
idealising love.
Love this portrait:
Hawk moths hover,
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup,
with casual promiscuity,
love this eloquent imagery:
to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
Love moonlit lace and the closing note of LOVE.
Wish I had a six.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, RD. Much appreciated. Tony
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:-)))))))
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Hawk Moths", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Short,succinct and very much to the point. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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"Hawk Moths", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Short,succinct and very much to the point. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Duchess. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from royowen
Yet another sweetly written and highly descriptive work, creating great imagery, in original and poetic language that has a uniqueness to this unusually short work, that gives wings to artistic expression. A really good entry in this free verse contest Tony, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Yet another sweetly written and highly descriptive work, creating great imagery, in original and poetic language that has a uniqueness to this unusually short work, that gives wings to artistic expression. A really good entry in this free verse contest Tony, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your very kind review and good luck wishes, Roy. Much appreciated. Tony
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Most welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Hawk Moths, presents a poetic capture of the metaphorical moth delighting in the flirtatious nectar kanoodling as the backdrop of night provides a mood for love and nature. Nice.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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This free verse, Hawk Moths, presents a poetic capture of the metaphorical moth delighting in the flirtatious nectar kanoodling as the backdrop of night provides a mood for love and nature. Nice.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Bill. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice free verse poem about the Hawk Moth. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. Blessings and best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is a very nice free verse poem about the Hawk Moth. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. Blessings and best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Teri. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how wonderful hawk like instinct of hovering over jasmine flowers and goes along all moonlit nice kissing all other flowers takes rest idealising love of flowers; I liked.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This speaks how wonderful hawk like instinct of hovering over jasmine flowers and goes along all moonlit nice kissing all other flowers takes rest idealising love of flowers; I liked.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Alcreator. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from jaded831
I like it, the reader actually can experience a tranquil evening. I could smell the jasmine in the air and visualize the Hawk moth hovering. The picture compliments your lovely poem. Thanks for taking me on a mini vacation.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I like it, the reader actually can experience a tranquil evening. I could smell the jasmine in the air and visualize the Hawk moth hovering. The picture compliments your lovely poem. Thanks for taking me on a mini vacation.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Jaded. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem and introducing me to the Hawk Moth thst seems to be an interesting insect that are able to hover over the flowers will sipping from the flower cups.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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A very well-written free verse poem and introducing me to the Hawk Moth thst seems to be an interesting insect that are able to hover over the flowers will sipping from the flower cups.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Sandra. Yes, they are somewhat like hummingbirds in that respect.