Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

This is a perfect love poem contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Of course, I am a hopeless romantic. You did a wonderful job writing this entry. I wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your review and six star award, Barbara. There should be more hopeless romantics in this world! Best wishes, Tony

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Eloquent and original. Masterfully crafted. Musically rich and nuanced. Bravo. I love the inventive slant rhymes of clasp and vast, alarm and form, prayer and clear. I don't think awe and adore work as a slant rhyme, though. Glance and resonance work fine.



Love all the S and C sounds here:

their balanced architecture's strong, sublime
as spires that soar from churches' heights, so vast
in concept that, when carillons ring clear,
they seem to shake the sky in sweet alarm, LOVE THIS LINE!
awaking inspiration with their prayer
to bless such harmonies of human form.

LOVE THIS LINE:
and coyly osculate in resonance.

Comma suggestions:
their bodies tense and, with a loving glance(,)
their eyes connect,(no ,) as(,) shyly(,) they adore


As art unites with life(,) expressing bliss,
true meaning is renewed in Rodin's Kiss. PERFECT CLOSING NOTE


Almost a six. Bravo. Loved it!

A strong contender, for sure.

Refined and delightful.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks, RD, for your constructive review (as always!), your gift of commas, and for your kind words! Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

reply by rama devi on 24-Jul-2018

Thanks for your gracious response, dear Tony.

Warm Smiles, rd

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

beautifully rhymed and so well written. Tony. a very fine love poem inspired by a most inspiring sculpture. truly an amazing piece art..........meeshu

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your kind words, Meeshu. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This love poem in sonnet form, The Kiss, captures the statue, the eternal sense of this positioning (reminiscent of A Grecian Urn), and the effect on observers who feel the need to "coyly osculate in resonance."

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your kind words, Bill. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Praveen J.

Excellent

I am not sure I properly understood the first half of your poem. The second part of onlookers getting inspired to kiss is more straightforward. But overall I kinda like it.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your review, Praveen. Much appreciated. Glad you kinda liked the poem. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Blue Hendrix

Excellent

Lovely read. I enjoyed the flow the rhymes and your word choices were good and tied together nicely overall a really wonderfully written poem. Nice job!

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your kind words, Blue Hendrix. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

reply by Blue Hendrix on 24-Jul-2018

You're welcome

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Love Poem' writing prompt.
Your verse is well written. The picture is amazing as well.
Nicely done and I wish you luck in the contest.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your kind words, Sharon. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony