Writings From the Heart
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Comment from bowls
There are some beautiful sentiments here. Your intermingling of your love affair with water imagery gives the poem more depth as there's an extra layer of meaning. Your constant questioning suggests you are desperate for assurances that she'll be there for you. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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There are some beautiful sentiments here. Your intermingling of your love affair with water imagery gives the poem more depth as there's an extra layer of meaning. Your constant questioning suggests you are desperate for assurances that she'll be there for you. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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thank you bowls for your welcome review
Comment from Maria7
This poem feels heartfelt and sweet, but not really original. Many of the lines seem like they are cliches or idioms, overused in poetry, and sort of meaningless. The accompanying photo is beautiful!
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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This poem feels heartfelt and sweet, but not really original. Many of the lines seem like they are cliches or idioms, overused in poetry, and sort of meaningless. The accompanying photo is beautiful!
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you for your review when you write a poem please let me know so i can review yours, but i see you did not write at this time and i see your rating does not count so i will wate to see your work thank you please return the points for reading
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This is not Maria writing, but maybe before you are so rude to her, you should know that she is a smart young girl. Perhaps you should take what she says as constructive instead of being so offended.
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her review was not constructive but offended, she needs to write before she reviews have a nice day
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How do you know Maria doesn't write? Perhaps you shouldn't assume.
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I am going to report you if you are not more polite to Maria. If you can''t handle constructive criticism without being retaliatory because you have thin skin, don't post your stuff for review.
Comment from debskatz
Hi deepwater,
I take back my promise of not reviewing any of yours again. I meant to do it earlier with a piece of yours I really liked, somehow got away from me.
But I truly love this poem. It speaks to my heart for those are exactly some things I'd like to say but never could find the words.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Hi deepwater,
I take back my promise of not reviewing any of yours again. I meant to do it earlier with a piece of yours I really liked, somehow got away from me.
But I truly love this poem. It speaks to my heart for those are exactly some things I'd like to say but never could find the words.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you deb for the review and comment Gary
Comment from Nanny 6
This is most elequently written with a hear of passion and most excellent metaphor. I enjoyed the heartfelt love and fear portrayed in this piece. Well done! Judy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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This is most elequently written with a hear of passion and most excellent metaphor. I enjoyed the heartfelt love and fear portrayed in this piece. Well done! Judy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you for your most welcome review and comments Judy
Comment from connied
There are no guarantees in life--and yet we still ask!! I hope that you make the right choices and find and are able to hold on to that elusive thing called happiness--well portrayed here!
Are you: my love, my life, my soul mate? do I dare to dream,
Can we stand hand in hand at peace with the understanding of time in this moonlight?
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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There are no guarantees in life--and yet we still ask!! I hope that you make the right choices and find and are able to hold on to that elusive thing called happiness--well portrayed here!
Are you: my love, my life, my soul mate? do I dare to dream,
Can we stand hand in hand at peace with the understanding of time in this moonlight?
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review connied
Comment from Lynar
It was so clear to see how one lover bemoans the lost of another. (when I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness) (Only to replenish yourself with the winds of change). In the absence of love the heart speaks, in reflective voice. The poetry format was pleasing to the eyes in non rhyme. An excellent mesh Artwork with words. I would recommend to my friends, Writing From the Heart. No negative comments. Excellent.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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It was so clear to see how one lover bemoans the lost of another. (when I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness) (Only to replenish yourself with the winds of change). In the absence of love the heart speaks, in reflective voice. The poetry format was pleasing to the eyes in non rhyme. An excellent mesh Artwork with words. I would recommend to my friends, Writing From the Heart. No negative comments. Excellent.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you for your welcome comments Lynar
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It was my pleasure, deepwater
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again thank you
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OK, deepwater
Comment from raw form
The only thing in this world thats constant is change and you captured that eloquently with your poem deep I dig the style and the flow good write.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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The only thing in this world thats constant is change and you captured that eloquently with your poem deep I dig the style and the flow good write.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you Raw for this review
Comment from ophelia91380
I felt as though I could be the reflection that you were writing about, it connected that well. Wow, the depth of the subject is reflected in the metaphor of the water. I truly enjoyed reading. My favorite stanza was the last one, and the last line was my favorite.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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I felt as though I could be the reflection that you were writing about, it connected that well. Wow, the depth of the subject is reflected in the metaphor of the water. I truly enjoyed reading. My favorite stanza was the last one, and the last line was my favorite.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you again for this review
Comment from fhree
Hi
I noted at the top "writings from the heart", and this was true to that indeed,
the writing reflecting the feelings inside.
The ending was thought provoking and powerful.
Fhree
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Hi
I noted at the top "writings from the heart", and this was true to that indeed,
the writing reflecting the feelings inside.
The ending was thought provoking and powerful.
Fhree
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you fhree for this review
Comment from gramalot8
Deepwater, a very good visual and metaphoric poem about the unknowns where love is concerned. Love your impressive language. Good picture. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Deepwater, a very good visual and metaphoric poem about the unknowns where love is concerned. Love your impressive language. Good picture. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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thank you gramalot for this review