Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Black Moon Glinting"An extended story in poem form
89 total reviews
Comment from knowledge
Here are six-stars. They are well deserved. As I said before, you are a very talented poet in the footsteps of Edgar Alan Poe.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Here are six-stars. They are well deserved. As I said before, you are a very talented poet in the footsteps of Edgar Alan Poe.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thank you, Knowledge. You've spoiled me with these catch-up reviews! I'm honoured by your fantastic comments :-)
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is extremely good. It never dawned on me that any one could tell numerous parts of a story in poetry and have a background comment. Wow, I am waing eagerly for part 2.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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This is extremely good. It never dawned on me that any one could tell numerous parts of a story in poetry and have a background comment. Wow, I am waing eagerly for part 2.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thank you so much for the great review, Barbara :-). I'm planning to write an interlude next, then get on with chapter 5 / the start of part 1!
Mike
Comment from ryanlion
this is certainly unusual and quite gothic in many ways. it flows well and tells a thought provoking story, with some interesting characters, nicely done
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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this is certainly unusual and quite gothic in many ways. it flows well and tells a thought provoking story, with some interesting characters, nicely done
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Ryan :-). I've been enjoying writing with the dark, sinister tone, so yeah Gothic is a reasonable word to use.
Mike
Comment from dragonqueen1983
i've always loved long poem that make up a story. this one is well written and i love the picture and colours that you used. well done
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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i've always loved long poem that make up a story. this one is well written and i love the picture and colours that you used. well done
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Dragonqueen :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed the read!
Mike
Comment from Jarlsbane
This is my first reading of your epic story-poem. I am very impressed! You carried the story well and maintained a smooth poetic flow throughout the work. Your descriptions are very good and for the most part the rhymes don't seem forced.
I did pause at "nowt"-- I was sure you meant "naught" but I looked the word up (a rare occurrence) and found it to mean 'naught' in a british dialect. I am mystified why you would use it when none of your other language is in a british dialect??
I enjoyed the read, thanks! Jarls
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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This is my first reading of your epic story-poem. I am very impressed! You carried the story well and maintained a smooth poetic flow throughout the work. Your descriptions are very good and for the most part the rhymes don't seem forced.
I did pause at "nowt"-- I was sure you meant "naught" but I looked the word up (a rare occurrence) and found it to mean 'naught' in a british dialect. I am mystified why you would use it when none of your other language is in a british dialect??
I enjoyed the read, thanks! Jarls
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thanks, Jarls :-). Being English, I always write in UK English. To me Naught and Nowt mean slightly different things, so I didn't really think of it as dialect, just the word I'd use. Thanks for a great review; I'm really glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from dportwood
Fleedleflump,
A nice easy-reading poem with a story of agony, impending doom, and finally, hope. Quatrain structure and abcb rhyming pattern very well done. Good job.
Duane
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Fleedleflump,
A nice easy-reading poem with a story of agony, impending doom, and finally, hope. Quatrain structure and abcb rhyming pattern very well done. Good job.
Duane
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Duane. Unlike earlier chapters, I made a conscious effort to stick rigidly to the structure with this one. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from Vickstarxx
I thought this was amazing! I really enjoyed reading your work the flow and imagery is excellent and definitely deserved 6 stars!
The birth of possibilities
then burgeoned in my mind
Is so descriptive! well done.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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I thought this was amazing! I really enjoyed reading your work the flow and imagery is excellent and definitely deserved 6 stars!
The birth of possibilities
then burgeoned in my mind
Is so descriptive! well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thank you, Vickstar :-). What a wonderful and flattering review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from Judian James
Finally, a sixer for you. The body of this work (with the exception of one errant line, lol) has been outstanding from the first post's first line. I could quote this entire piece : "Medusa; Gorgon, my demise,
now petrified by fear.
Her snakes my desperation,
my crime a single tear." Fabulous visual followed by and even better one " she set their demons free.
Their thoughts became but crimson clouds;
their dreams rained over me" and done so perfectly in rhyming poetry. BRAVO Mike. Standing ovation from my den in Maine!! Oh, and I loved the ending ... there's always hope. superb!
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Finally, a sixer for you. The body of this work (with the exception of one errant line, lol) has been outstanding from the first post's first line. I could quote this entire piece : "Medusa; Gorgon, my demise,
now petrified by fear.
Her snakes my desperation,
my crime a single tear." Fabulous visual followed by and even better one " she set their demons free.
Their thoughts became but crimson clouds;
their dreams rained over me" and done so perfectly in rhyming poetry. BRAVO Mike. Standing ovation from my den in Maine!! Oh, and I loved the ending ... there's always hope. superb!
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Jude, I'm honoured by your great rating. I'm just sorry it's taken me a while to reply. Bank holiday here in Britain, and my best friend's wedding day tomorrow! Busy busy busy...
Mike
PS: Thank you for the standing ovation :-)
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Oh, I just posted the final chapter of The Doorway. Take a quick look when you can. No need for a review. I'm glad you're well. I was worried that maybe Naomi was sicker.
Have a blast at the wedding
Comment from adewpearl
as thought the radiation's stage - do you mean as though?
wow, that is one bizarre way to find one's Eve
I like this guy's way of t hinking when he realizes those made insane by the radiation are not people to hate but victims, just like him
The scene where she shoots down the guys about to kill him just as they are about to do the deed is really dramatic - this is quite a powerful story, Mike - your ability to create other worlds always amazes me. Brooke
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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as thought the radiation's stage - do you mean as though?
wow, that is one bizarre way to find one's Eve
I like this guy's way of t hinking when he realizes those made insane by the radiation are not people to hate but victims, just like him
The scene where she shoots down the guys about to kill him just as they are about to do the deed is really dramatic - this is quite a powerful story, Mike - your ability to create other worlds always amazes me. Brooke
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Brooke; a timely catch there! I think, more than anything else, the Wandering Man is just tired. He knows anger won't help and that his captors have survived the same, unnatural way he has. The next chapter is set to be an interlude with some background :-)
Mike
Comment from honeytree
The art work was very telling, and the words very interesting to read.This experience would have been frightening, but turned out to be alright in the end.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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The art work was very telling, and the words very interesting to read.This experience would have been frightening, but turned out to be alright in the end.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Honeytree. I really appreciate your continued support of this series.
Mike