Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Excellent contest entry. Fourteen syllables brings across how springtime get the love juices flowing.
This picture is perfect for this poem. I'm not venturing any guesses, but whomever she is, she's beautiful. Good luck,,,jim
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Excellent contest entry. Fourteen syllables brings across how springtime get the love juices flowing.
This picture is perfect for this poem. I'm not venturing any guesses, but whomever she is, she's beautiful. Good luck,,,jim
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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Comment from minopavlic
The cleverness and simplicity of your short love poem, which impresses upon the mind, more thought and emotion, than could a thousand words. The photo represents elegance, and a confident gracefulness.
Thank you for sharing.
no_obstacle
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The cleverness and simplicity of your short love poem, which impresses upon the mind, more thought and emotion, than could a thousand words. The photo represents elegance, and a confident gracefulness.
Thank you for sharing.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture. love does fly on high and
i wish you the best of luck in this contest. good job
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture. love does fly on high and
i wish you the best of luck in this contest. good job
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
Great picture adorning this work; meets the contest requirements very well; best wishes in the voting booth. Very uplifting!
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Great picture adorning this work; meets the contest requirements very well; best wishes in the voting booth. Very uplifting!
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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Comment from Amicus
This is an interesting and thought provoking piece of free verse...the illustration and ambiguity of the writing makes for a most mysterious effect...I am free to make up a whole romance tale for the woman picture but clearly it must be one that begins with high expectations and a sense of exciting flight...
Good luck in the competition.
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This is an interesting and thought provoking piece of free verse...the illustration and ambiguity of the writing makes for a most mysterious effect...I am free to make up a whole romance tale for the woman picture but clearly it must be one that begins with high expectations and a sense of exciting flight...
Good luck in the competition.
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Comment from menachem
Cool. Two suggestions:
1. "Faith of Love" should probably be capitalized.
2. Try trading "Blooms", with "Blossoms"
Also, why is "Birds" capitalized?
Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Cool. Two suggestions:
1. "Faith of Love" should probably be capitalized.
2. Try trading "Blooms", with "Blossoms"
Also, why is "Birds" capitalized?
Good luck.
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author,
I enjoyed this short love poem and as The Jersey Shore is my home, I enjoyed the 1946 photo. What part of Jersey is the photo from? Smiles, LateBloomer
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Hello author,
I enjoyed this short love poem and as The Jersey Shore is my home, I enjoyed the 1946 photo. What part of Jersey is the photo from? Smiles, LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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Comment from Realist101
What a beautiful lady. And a short, but great little poem to match. She looks like she is meeting a love along the board walk? Or beach? Very nice!! I can see and hear the seagulls above! :) Susan
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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What a beautiful lady. And a short, but great little poem to match. She looks like she is meeting a love along the board walk? Or beach? Very nice!! I can see and hear the seagulls above! :) Susan
Comment Written 20-May-2010
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thank you Susan its the beach
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OH I thought so!! Very nice! Is this a photo of someone real, or a FS pix? Either way it is perfect...S.
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mom at 16
Comment from Alpha Female
very nicely done, the picture adds beautifully to the poem, the cadence and rhyme are excellent, very good job, good luck with this one.
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very nicely done, the picture adds beautifully to the poem, the cadence and rhyme are excellent, very good job, good luck with this one.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
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thank you Alpha
Comment from bluedragon776
First of all, I would like to say I appreciate the brevity of this piece. As I studied the photograph I think of perhaps this could be part of a scrapbook. A classic photo with captivating line of poetry. Who is the lady? It's kind of like living part of someone's history. Fascinating. Good luck with the contest.
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First of all, I would like to say I appreciate the brevity of this piece. As I studied the photograph I think of perhaps this could be part of a scrapbook. A classic photo with captivating line of poetry. Who is the lady? It's kind of like living part of someone's history. Fascinating. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
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thank you