Comment from poetbear

Excellent

From the lyric The Impossible Dream
"This is my quest tp follow that star no matter how hopeless no matter how far. To be willing to march into Hell for a heavenly cause.
This piece reminded me of that song because of ist power and passion.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from ravenblack

Good

While you do capture the feel of World War One quite well and your cadence marches down the page, you really need to pay attention to your verb conjugation. "Thoughts of love was left behind". Was should be were to be in agreement with the plural thoughts. "Judgement to" should also be "judgement on". Make the adjustments and I will adjust my rating accordingly.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks done
Gary

Comment from Ekim777

Exceptional

A striking piece as men are exhorted to give up their live in order to revive dead symbols and a dying civilization. It all adds up to a collective insanity. That was the war to end all wars. It was fought without much success. The poem was written with a raw, grass roots style as reality is revealed. Our poet wastes no words.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

War is horrific whenever or wherever it occurs. I lost an uncle in the Korean War and a cousin in Vietnam nam. The ravages of war are far reaching.
Good rhythm and good descriptions in this well written poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Raphael Montonaro

Excellent

A very well written but reserved poem about war. There is a lesson here for everyone! Good form and good content! Keep writing this was good!

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Tegan1311

Excellent

This is a very well done poem. Your words flow well the message sad, but heartfelt. One thing: in the second to last line I think the word 'was' should be were or are to sound better (just a suggestion of course). Great job.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

It was a cold time. Definitely defined of the world war two. Scars we may never get rid off. A silent pain that carries on. Only love remains in our heart before death emerges. Clarity defined in this poem. A unique-rhyming poem.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi GW,

No matter the times. War seems to always be around us on one front or the other.

In your words, I could visualize the battle - good imagery.

Cheers & Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Hello there~!
Wow! This is a truly well-written piece of poetry. And historic at that! Being a student and lover of history, I admire this a lot!
Thanks for sharing~
JazakAllah Khair~!

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from lappmellott

Excellent

I just love your poetry. This one was no exception. Great job and it's easy to tell that you write from the heart. Nice photograph you chose to use with it.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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