Comment from Ann Smith

Excellent

You know, this poem has a strong voice and yet a still voice. It is a voice of living a life to the best that you can, and yet, there is a voice, still wondering and hoping it was enough. We all will be laid to rest with loved ones left behind to morn. The poem has strong details and images of that day. ann

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010

thank you for the comments and review Ann

Comment from fluffnstuff

Exceptional

Wowsers. this is really something to ponder on. I love the wording and the picture you chose to go with it. Really brought the feel of the ending of life and the chill of an October beach. Well done in my eyes.!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010

thank you for your welcome review and comments fluffnstuff Gary

reply by fluffnstuff on 30-Jun-2010

your so welcome dianne

Comment from jwlee211

Excellent

Great poem. I like the opening line and the fact that you repeat the line at the end. You pull the reader into this poem. A great read

 Comment Written 31-May-2010

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reply by the author on 31-May-2010

thank you for reading jwlee GW

Comment from kintesiegel

Excellent

this is anot her interesting piece from you where you contemplate your own death and what your life meant left behind for the rest of us.

if you got some "glory" from your life you are already ahead of most of us who live these banal lives. What about the other side of the coin?

 Comment Written 31-May-2010

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reply by the author on 31-May-2010

thanks for reading

Comment from seewhatimwritingnow

Excellent

How beautiful- looking and reflecting as the end approaches. I'm hoping, of course, that this is sheer imangination speaking- Okay, I'll allow a 'spark' of truth, but do not want to lose one of Fanstory's greatest poets! Thanks for sharing deepwater! Betty

 Comment Written 31-May-2010

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reply by the author on 31-May-2010

thank you Betty GW

Comment from workout14

Excellent

THIS TOPIC IS AND AND THE WRITING STYLE IN THIS POEM IS EXCELLENT! I WOULD GIVE YOU 6 STARS, BUT I WENT ABOVE MY LIMIT. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND GOD BLESS.

 Comment Written 31-May-2010

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reply by the author on 31-May-2010

thank you workout

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

I like this realistic review of your life.
The regrets you have find echo with most people I think, and the desire to know if we have accomplished all that was expected of us, and our own personal goals.
These are surely pertinent questions at such a time.


Juliette

 Comment Written 30-May-2010

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reply by the author on 30-May-2010

thank you Juliette

Comment from Alexander E Poet

Excellent

I thought this was short very powerful, and spoke with the with authority and information, I thought it was passionate creative and also insightful. I love the the closing paragraph that you have used, easy to read easy to understand Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander

 Comment Written 30-May-2010

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reply by the author on 30-May-2010

thanks QQ for reading

Comment from jgaman

Excellent

The art you chose made me feel the cool chill of an October morn. The best part of this is the line "Regrets I have some, did it change the outcome, to what was so expected" because that is the great unanswered question when we all pass on. Good work.

 Comment Written 29-May-2010

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reply by the author on 29-May-2010

thanks again jg

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

deepwater,

I enjoyed this writing very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.

I only spotted one small error, nothing to get too upset about-

Regrets** I have some, did it change the outcome, to what
**a comma goes here

There were no other problems that I could see.

I am looking forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 29-May-2010

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reply by the author on 29-May-2010

thank you oatmeal