Another Pretty Face
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Comment from L.lora
You just have to love Joe.
He is too perfect, almost.
I adore your characters, you've
defined them well and they are
charismatic... Your descriptions
are great, they give the reader
colorful images to blend with
the excellent dialogue. YOur
addition to your storyline flows
well and makes for an easy comfortable
read. no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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You just have to love Joe.
He is too perfect, almost.
I adore your characters, you've
defined them well and they are
charismatic... Your descriptions
are great, they give the reader
colorful images to blend with
the excellent dialogue. YOur
addition to your storyline flows
well and makes for an easy comfortable
read. no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
You're giving your fans just what they want, so I guess you're on the right track.
I can review this chapter, but I hesitate to critique the work. You're repeating words again and Joe has already kissed Sara in front of Cassie. If I'm not mistaken, he did so on the porch before they went jogging to the hardware store. Maybe it was just a tight hug, I'm not sure.
It's a formula romance and way out of my league. Your reviewers are thrilled with the book. Keep it going.
Ted
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
You're giving your fans just what they want, so I guess you're on the right track.
I can review this chapter, but I hesitate to critique the work. You're repeating words again and Joe has already kissed Sara in front of Cassie. If I'm not mistaken, he did so on the porch before they went jogging to the hardware store. Maybe it was just a tight hug, I'm not sure.
It's a formula romance and way out of my league. Your reviewers are thrilled with the book. Keep it going.
Ted
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Joe never kissed Sara. He started to, but never completed it. I keep getting and average of two - three new fans with every post. I have tried not to repeat words, I will go through and check for them. Thank you for hanging in with me. I did get two stars on my previous post. He said he couldn't tell who was speaking from the dialogue. I honestly felt he was wrong. Other's seems to know who was speaking. I am fixing the errors that are pointed out.
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Okay. I thought they kissed.
Don't worry about the "two" it doesn't mean anything anyway.
Ted
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I have gone back and hopefully edited the redunit words.
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Okay :)
You sent a blank reply?
Ted
Comment from fionageorge
Babara, you have made my eyes moist. This is just too too beautiful - are there really men like Joe in the world? Wonderful writing, my friend. Great narrative, excellent dialogue. A very romantic and special chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Almost made me wish my husband was home! LOL :o)
I wanted to take you to[remove 'to'] out in style
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Babara, you have made my eyes moist. This is just too too beautiful - are there really men like Joe in the world? Wonderful writing, my friend. Great narrative, excellent dialogue. A very romantic and special chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Almost made me wish my husband was home! LOL :o)
I wanted to take you to[remove 'to'] out in style
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your support.
Comment from LadyWave
The big night is finally here! Joe is such a sweetheart - can he be for real? I continue to love the flirty vibe between them and the promise of what's to come. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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The big night is finally here! Joe is such a sweetheart - can he be for real? I continue to love the flirty vibe between them and the promise of what's to come. Keep it up!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Monte Carbolic
Another fine addition to your book, my friend. As I stated before, romantic fiction isn't my usual cup of tea, but this is very enjoyable and so not cliched. Great work.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Another fine addition to your book, my friend. As I stated before, romantic fiction isn't my usual cup of tea, but this is very enjoyable and so not cliched. Great work.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your continueing to follow.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is a really fine chapter about a budding romance, well worthy of six stars. I wonder if the cats will come out in the next chapter.
I found one tiny nit:
"This [is] supposed to be tight."
Dave
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
This is a really fine chapter about a budding romance, well worthy of six stars. I wonder if the cats will come out in the next chapter.
I found one tiny nit:
"This [is] supposed to be tight."
Dave
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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I could give you a hug for all your support. I appreciate your review and I for finding the error. I have fixed it. Thank you.
Comment from Dom G Robles
I like this story. I like the way the author starts with the romantic scene--Sara opening the door for Joe who had been on the dot to pick her for the Reunion. While Sara was not ready yet, and had many things to do with her own fixtures, such as zippering her dress and polishing her finger nails...they had little time to talk about things. Joe also had the opportunity to ask about the flowers he had sent earlier before he came to the house. Then finally they were in the reunion riding the Porsche that Joe had just owned. They enjoyed the dance with a lot of remembering and reminiscence with their friends. Nicely written. Dom
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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I like this story. I like the way the author starts with the romantic scene--Sara opening the door for Joe who had been on the dot to pick her for the Reunion. While Sara was not ready yet, and had many things to do with her own fixtures, such as zippering her dress and polishing her finger nails...they had little time to talk about things. Joe also had the opportunity to ask about the flowers he had sent earlier before he came to the house. Then finally they were in the reunion riding the Porsche that Joe had just owned. They enjoyed the dance with a lot of remembering and reminiscence with their friends. Nicely written. Dom
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You are welcome, Dom.
Comment from Belinda
I find myself surprised again and again for the perfect gentlemen Joe proves himself to be. I just hope this is too much, so Sara won't be hurt afterward if he changes just a little bit. See, I'm defending Sara already... :)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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I find myself surprised again and again for the perfect gentlemen Joe proves himself to be. I just hope this is too much, so Sara won't be hurt afterward if he changes just a little bit. See, I'm defending Sara already... :)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Joe does have some faults and we will see them soon.
Comment from adewpearl
This supposed to be tight - This is
It's almost year old - a year old
the affect something might have on a child - effect
I love the way this guy flirts - he sounds suave and sincere at the same time :-) Great dialogue - her vulnerability and humility is endearing and his desire to be noble and romantic shines through :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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This supposed to be tight - This is
It's almost year old - a year old
the affect something might have on a child - effect
I love the way this guy flirts - he sounds suave and sincere at the same time :-) Great dialogue - her vulnerability and humility is endearing and his desire to be noble and romantic shines through :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for catching those I ahve made the changes. Isn't every women's dream? Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Ponder
Hi Barbara,
This chapter is well written and very engaging as usual. The section at the begining where Joe helps Sara to get ready is very well done.
I would have liked a bit more detail about the restaurant and other people at the reunion, also more on the reactions of the others as they walked in, and (if this makes sense) the reactions of Joe and Sara to the reactions of the others.
Here are two small typos I found corrections in brackets
"It's almost (a) year old. I wanted to take you to out in style
When the kissed (kiss) ended, she gulped
Jules
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara,
This chapter is well written and very engaging as usual. The section at the begining where Joe helps Sara to get ready is very well done.
I would have liked a bit more detail about the restaurant and other people at the reunion, also more on the reactions of the others as they walked in, and (if this makes sense) the reactions of Joe and Sara to the reactions of the others.
Here are two small typos I found corrections in brackets
"It's almost (a) year old. I wanted to take you to out in style
When the kissed (kiss) ended, she gulped
Jules
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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More details will come as we continue with the reunion. Thank you for your kind review. I have made the changes.