Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from writerwish
I just love this story and it keeps my interest so well. I hope it gets published soon. I will but it for sure. I like the dialogue and how it defines its characters. Sometimes I feel in my book that right now there is just too much narrative. It will have more dialogue if I could just hold the readers interest till then.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I just love this story and it keeps my interest so well. I hope it gets published soon. I will but it for sure. I like the dialogue and how it defines its characters. Sometimes I feel in my book that right now there is just too much narrative. It will have more dialogue if I could just hold the readers interest till then.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I get gigged sometimes for too much dialogue, but I perfer to write that way. Thank you for your kind reivew.
Comment from Cletus Hardiman
Wow....I have missed so much of your writing... I need to catch up! LOL I enjoyed reading this and your notes about domestic violence. It is a horrible shame! I could go on and on on this one! Thanks for a great write! Clete
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Wow....I have missed so much of your writing... I need to catch up! LOL I enjoyed reading this and your notes about domestic violence. It is a horrible shame! I could go on and on on this one! Thanks for a great write! Clete
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Within minutes Betty returned a tray holding three glasses of ice tea and gave Betty the first glass.
[I'll bet Betty gave Margaret the first glass.]
It was very short. It flowed smoothly and continued the story well. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Within minutes Betty returned a tray holding three glasses of ice tea and gave Betty the first glass.
[I'll bet Betty gave Margaret the first glass.]
It was very short. It flowed smoothly and continued the story well. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for catching that. I am shocked no one esle has mentioned it.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great writing as always. It is such an important story and a very enjoyable one at the same time. I like the fact that you have caring people looking for Anna. I'm curious about where she went? Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Great writing as always. It is such an important story and a very enjoyable one at the same time. I like the fact that you have caring people looking for Anna. I'm curious about where she went? Great job.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from sunnilicious
I think Anna found her way back to Bobby, or committed suicide. So much details. You're so informative. But those statistics completely saddened me. And it's Saturday morning. Let's hope my weekend picks up. Otherwise, I'll be thinking about such horrible crap going on around the place.
I think High School's everywhere should have a relationship course. Maybe senior year. That could lessen the domestic violence and stuff.
Have a nice weekend.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I think Anna found her way back to Bobby, or committed suicide. So much details. You're so informative. But those statistics completely saddened me. And it's Saturday morning. Let's hope my weekend picks up. Otherwise, I'll be thinking about such horrible crap going on around the place.
I think High School's everywhere should have a relationship course. Maybe senior year. That could lessen the domestic violence and stuff.
Have a nice weekend.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Somewhere I read that date violence starts as early as 14. I think maybe in 8th grade this education needs to beging. Thank you for your kind review.
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I don't think dating should begin so young, but I suppose it's a socio-economic situation. Dating should start when the hormones can be kept under control (between 16 to 18). I'm just had some input. And I look forward to reading coming chapters. :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
a good descriptice piece, Barbara..
your style setting the scene
clearly for the readers... and
the speech flows naturally.
Within minutes(,) Betty returned (with) a tray holding three
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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a good descriptice piece, Barbara..
your style setting the scene
clearly for the readers... and
the speech flows naturally.
Within minutes(,) Betty returned (with) a tray holding three
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I will make that change, thank you for noticing.
Comment from Janie King
This is very interesting and reads smoothly. You have chosen your words wisely to where your reader is able to see each scene as your paint it with words for them. God bless,
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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This is very interesting and reads smoothly. You have chosen your words wisely to where your reader is able to see each scene as your paint it with words for them. God bless,
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
Oh, my! It's hard to believe that it is or was that high. It is very depressing to think there are 60 percent of marriages have violence in them. Maybe we should teach young people how to live with each other and how to solve their problems in a better way. You're chapter is well written, but very short. It is good that you are bringing this to our attention. Thank you for sharing this information in novel form. April
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Oh, my! It's hard to believe that it is or was that high. It is very depressing to think there are 60 percent of marriages have violence in them. Maybe we should teach young people how to live with each other and how to solve their problems in a better way. You're chapter is well written, but very short. It is good that you are bringing this to our attention. Thank you for sharing this information in novel form. April
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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One never knows what goes on behind closed doors. Thank you for the kind review,
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You're welcome, Barbara. That's true. April
Comment from JW
One still wonders where Anna might have gone. Thanks for sharing this very well written chapter. It makes a great addition to your story. JW
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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One still wonders where Anna might have gone. Thanks for sharing this very well written chapter. It makes a great addition to your story. JW
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from 7thpoet
I was a bit disappointed, not because of the story but because I have to wait now to find out where Anna is hiding, or if she is hiding at all.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I was a bit disappointed, not because of the story but because I have to wait now to find out where Anna is hiding, or if she is hiding at all.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I purposely don't want to reveal Anna's whereabout, yet. I am wanting my readers to worry about her too. Thank you for your kind review.