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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Readywriter52
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I didn't think that when Mrs. Rodgers wasn't in court that she had given up. She firmly believes everything Bobby tells her. She will stop at nothing to get Michael. Even if the authorities don't know why tried to kidnap Michael, she is my first suspect.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
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This is another good part, but you have lost some concentration with a few sentences.
"The court ordered anger management courses ( which) will help. I've seen situations where they've worked"
"Will you be all right until you (your) attorney arrives?"
Well done otherwise old sport

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    I changed both those areas while posting and still didn't get them right. Thank you for catching them.
Comment from AprilShower
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Yes. This is just a story, but I'm glad he is safe. These situations are very heartrending, and they do happen. In a perfect world two people would be able to get along with each other. It's too bad that some cannot be reached or helped. Good story, Barbara.

April

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    We don't live in a perfect world. I see it often at the school I teach at. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by AprilShower on 02-Oct-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from c_lucas
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This is a very strong chapter. It is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
reply by c_lucas on 02-Oct-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara. Good job of writing. Charlie
Comment from Gungalo
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Oh there is always something bad that counters something good. It's horrible to go through what she did only to end up being plagued by the mother-in-law. Or ... was it?

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    We shall see. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by Gungalo on 02-Oct-2011
    Hmmm, the intrigue is terrible. LOL.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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I knew that mother-in-law was trouble. You did a great job with this chapter. As always I am looking forward to the next one.

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 Comment Written 02-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.