Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Sweet Anita
I'm glad to see that Troy and Anna are becoming closer... or it seems that way.. Looks like a romance is starting to blossom.... Sounds interesting. I wonder what is in that red brick building? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Nita :-)
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I'm glad to see that Troy and Anna are becoming closer... or it seems that way.. Looks like a romance is starting to blossom.... Sounds interesting. I wonder what is in that red brick building? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Nita :-)
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I'm not sure how much time has passed, but bobby should be getting out soon, shouldn't he? Where Troy says that he's in jail, you might want to add Anna saying, "But he'l be out ... "
A smile[d] erupted across Anna's lips. "I wonder what he wants."
Roberta
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I'm not sure how much time has passed, but bobby should be getting out soon, shouldn't he? Where Troy says that he's in jail, you might want to add Anna saying, "But he'l be out ... "
A smile[d] erupted across Anna's lips. "I wonder what he wants."
Roberta
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I will make those corrections. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
You naughty girl, you! You left me hanging when I read your last line. I wish I knew what Troy wants Anna to see....but I have a feeling you are going make me wait until the next chapter! I have a feeling Bobby and his crazy mother are plotting their next move, I don't trust them and neither does Anna. Great chapter and I will hold my breath till you post again (sob) Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Hi Barbara,
You naughty girl, you! You left me hanging when I read your last line. I wish I knew what Troy wants Anna to see....but I have a feeling you are going make me wait until the next chapter! I have a feeling Bobby and his crazy mother are plotting their next move, I don't trust them and neither does Anna. Great chapter and I will hold my breath till you post again (sob) Blessings, chey
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
I hate being left up in the air but that is what a good story is suppose to do.Very good dialogue and characters
I would recommend this to others. I will be back for the next chapter.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I hate being left up in the air but that is what a good story is suppose to do.Very good dialogue and characters
I would recommend this to others. I will be back for the next chapter.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the playful and flirtatious conversation between Anna and Troy :-)
The rest of the lunch was eaten silently - I'd like to see that in active, not passive voice. - They ate the rest of lunch in silence.
I can't wait for what happens next :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I like the playful and flirtatious conversation between Anna and Troy :-)
The rest of the lunch was eaten silently - I'd like to see that in active, not passive voice. - They ate the rest of lunch in silence.
I can't wait for what happens next :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I stared at that line for a very long time. Sometimes the obvious isn't obvious. I'm glad you fixed it for me.
Comment from c_lucas
It is good to see Troy and Anna together. I hope Troy has a good surprise for her and that she can have a stronger grip on her life. Very well done.
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It is good to see Troy and Anna together. I hope Troy has a good surprise for her and that she can have a stronger grip on her life. Very well done.
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie