Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "part 4, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoy reading these chapters on the weekend.
I'm assuming this is Anna speaking, but you don't really say:
"Earlier this evening air was let out of my tire and a threatening note was left on my windshield. An officer came and took my statement. There's got to be something you can do." She adjusted Michael on her lap.
Bobbie isn't going to stop until I'm dead(,) and the police won't do anything until he kills me
Remember(,) Bobby's in jail."
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoy reading these chapters on the weekend.
I'm assuming this is Anna speaking, but you don't really say:
"Earlier this evening air was let out of my tire and a threatening note was left on my windshield. An officer came and took my statement. There's got to be something you can do." She adjusted Michael on her lap.
Bobbie isn't going to stop until I'm dead(,) and the police won't do anything until he kills me
Remember(,) Bobby's in jail."
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and I will look at those areas.
Comment from oNray
As we moved along the story made movement but nothing new or earth shaking. Can't be drama one hundred per cent of the time. We' ll see next chapter
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
As we moved along the story made movement but nothing new or earth shaking. Can't be drama one hundred per cent of the time. We' ll see next chapter
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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The next chapter starts to bring it all together. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
This must be a changing point for it isn't up to your usual par. The story is gettting interesting now and will soon be bringing on the big guns. Keep Anna and Michael safe. Most important.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
This must be a changing point for it isn't up to your usual par. The story is gettting interesting now and will soon be bringing on the big guns. Keep Anna and Michael safe. Most important.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Smile.
Comment from c_lucas
It looks like Anna will be protected by the best. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a captivating read. Good job.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
It looks like Anna will be protected by the best. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a captivating read. Good job.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie