Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Come, Woodsman"A collection of poems on these themes
95 total reviews
Comment from Starlit Ink
It's so amazing that a beautiful sonnet could be written about just one tree, but you pulled it off, showing great skill and insight. I enjoyed how the sonnet takes you through the life and death of the tree. The reader feels sorry for the tree. Best of luck with this strong contender.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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It's so amazing that a beautiful sonnet could be written about just one tree, but you pulled it off, showing great skill and insight. I enjoyed how the sonnet takes you through the life and death of the tree. The reader feels sorry for the tree. Best of luck with this strong contender.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thanks for the review and the kind words and the six stars. I have added a note now that the poem was not 'just' about a tree...
Steve
Comment from terry drake
Your poem was delightful and although we mature and grow old I don't want to miss anything along the way. I loved your rhyme choices and the verse had cadence in my review.
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Your poem was delightful and although we mature and grow old I don't want to miss anything along the way. I loved your rhyme choices and the verse had cadence in my review.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
Oh how profound! How very sad. A true testament of how we as humans have such little regard for things of this earth. The last line was absolutely it. I don't think any other line could have drawn it all together like that one did. Well written, nicely done!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Oh how profound! How very sad. A true testament of how we as humans have such little regard for things of this earth. The last line was absolutely it. I don't think any other line could have drawn it all together like that one did. Well written, nicely done!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Janet Foor
Great entry in the sonnet contest. "Come, Woodsman" is full of vivid imagery, perfect rhyme and it flows smoothly line after line. So many metaphors can be read into your carefully chosen words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Great entry in the sonnet contest. "Come, Woodsman" is full of vivid imagery, perfect rhyme and it flows smoothly line after line. So many metaphors can be read into your carefully chosen words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Steve, I have to admit that just the word 'sonnet' is enough to give me the poesy heebie-jeebies.
I should not have feared.
I like this parallel story (see, Steve, I see everything as a story). Trees, woodsmen, a parallel story. A synergy.
I'm impressed with your ability to maintain the metaphor
within the restraints of rhyme and meter.
I wonder if your sleight of hand will go unnoticed.
Best of luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Steve, I have to admit that just the word 'sonnet' is enough to give me the poesy heebie-jeebies.
I should not have feared.
I like this parallel story (see, Steve, I see everything as a story). Trees, woodsmen, a parallel story. A synergy.
I'm impressed with your ability to maintain the metaphor
within the restraints of rhyme and meter.
I wonder if your sleight of hand will go unnoticed.
Best of luck, Steve.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Well I thought the parallel was glaringly obvious, but most of the early reviews I got couldn't see the wood for the tree (ha, ha) so I added a helpful hint under the title...
Thank you for being perceptive enough not to need it!
Steve
Comment from robyn corum
I never give six star ratings. But I really liked this poem. If you would not be offended, I'd like to say that I can see it being read at funerals as tribute to lives lead in full and fruitful ways. It is a beautiful poem and a great tribute. It deserves the six and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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I never give six star ratings. But I really liked this poem. If you would not be offended, I'd like to say that I can see it being read at funerals as tribute to lives lead in full and fruitful ways. It is a beautiful poem and a great tribute. It deserves the six and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thanks, Robyn. What a great review. Glad you got the metaphor which seems to have eluded some reviewers.
Steve
Comment from Jane Johnson
Nicely written verse about the life of a tree. Good use of rhyme. Good word flow. Good artwork and imagery. I will look at trees differently now after reading this. Thanks for sharing this nicely written piece.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Nicely written verse about the life of a tree. Good use of rhyme. Good word flow. Good artwork and imagery. I will look at trees differently now after reading this. Thanks for sharing this nicely written piece.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Jigga
Good job...very well written and perfect art work to go with it.Autumn is a second spring when every leaf is a flower...Good luck in the contest. Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Good job...very well written and perfect art work to go with it.Autumn is a second spring when every leaf is a flower...Good luck in the contest. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Love the metaphor woven so perfectly throughout and blended with your vivid imagery just makes this a stunning and strong entry for the contest. Nice work and good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Love the metaphor woven so perfectly throughout and blended with your vivid imagery just makes this a stunning and strong entry for the contest. Nice work and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Hollyhock
Great sonnet. I loved the way you charted the life of the tree and then its demise,
"But every Summer ends in Autumn's tears" followed by the description of the failing tree and the inevitable ending,
"Come, Woodsman, swing your axe...."
On another level this could be viewed symbolically in praise of human life waiting for the blessed call.
Wonderful read.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Great sonnet. I loved the way you charted the life of the tree and then its demise,
"But every Summer ends in Autumn's tears" followed by the description of the failing tree and the inevitable ending,
"Come, Woodsman, swing your axe...."
On another level this could be viewed symbolically in praise of human life waiting for the blessed call.
Wonderful read.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thanks for the great review - I'm glad you picked the second layer of meaning. I've had a few reviewers who didn't get past 'nice poem about a tree....'
Steve