Writings From the Heart
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a sad but true commentary on the daily life of war as I would guess having never fought, luckily.
It has strong images and emotion. It shows how lonely and hopeless war is and how lucky those who return are.
I think there should be a comma after young in line 5.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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This is a sad but true commentary on the daily life of war as I would guess having never fought, luckily.
It has strong images and emotion. It shows how lonely and hopeless war is and how lucky those who return are.
I think there should be a comma after young in line 5.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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No problem.
dragonpoet
Comment from kiwisteveh
As the centenary of this war is upon us our thoughts turn more and more to the tragic events of those terrible years. Your poem brings some of those times to life. What a waste of a generation of young men.
Steve
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As the centenary of this war is upon us our thoughts turn more and more to the tragic events of those terrible years. Your poem brings some of those times to life. What a waste of a generation of young men.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from scd41
Your nice poem served to remind readers of the destruction and loss of human lives caused by The First World war. Even after nearly hundred years, man has not learnt any lessons. Wars have been waged and are still raging with more ferocity. Those who lay down their lives in wars may get some honour posthumously but they are, after all, someone's brothers, fathers or husbands whose personal loses remain indeterminate.Liked the poem.
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Your nice poem served to remind readers of the destruction and loss of human lives caused by The First World war. Even after nearly hundred years, man has not learnt any lessons. Wars have been waged and are still raging with more ferocity. Those who lay down their lives in wars may get some honour posthumously but they are, after all, someone's brothers, fathers or husbands whose personal loses remain indeterminate.Liked the poem.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Comment from BOWLED300
Awesome poem Oh how we take for granted our freedom in this great country of ours and the many men and women who have given their lives for their country. My father was in Vietnam and grandfather was in WWII. We must never forget where we came from thanks for sharing John M
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Awesome poem Oh how we take for granted our freedom in this great country of ours and the many men and women who have given their lives for their country. My father was in Vietnam and grandfather was in WWII. We must never forget where we came from thanks for sharing John M
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks for reading
Comment from visionary1234
What a lovely tribute to Pam, dw. She was a special presence who deeply touched so many of us! The First World War is an event that still touches me, as my grandfathers were both involved and had many stories to tell. My only useful critique here would be a grammatical point:
"Tomorrow will bring the same as today with less of my brothers beside",
- the correct English useage would not be 'less of' it would be 'fewer than' (which applies to numbers) - jiggers up your rhythm of course, but it sticks out as a grammatical point.
:)Sharyn
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What a lovely tribute to Pam, dw. She was a special presence who deeply touched so many of us! The First World War is an event that still touches me, as my grandfathers were both involved and had many stories to tell. My only useful critique here would be a grammatical point:
"Tomorrow will bring the same as today with less of my brothers beside",
- the correct English useage would not be 'less of' it would be 'fewer than' (which applies to numbers) - jiggers up your rhythm of course, but it sticks out as a grammatical point.
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Comment from DR DIP
Another deepwater classic. Beautiful flow always have a habit of trying to read every poem in rhyming beat..oh weell the downfalls of being a rhymer! lol
You have beautiful word combinations Deepy welll done
thanks for sharing
dip
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Another deepwater classic. Beautiful flow always have a habit of trying to read every poem in rhyming beat..oh weell the downfalls of being a rhymer! lol
You have beautiful word combinations Deepy welll done
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks dip
Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautiful piece of poetic art and a good social commentary on the ills of war! war is so futile and people so frail. they shouldn't be forced to kill.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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this is a beautiful piece of poetic art and a good social commentary on the ills of war! war is so futile and people so frail. they shouldn't be forced to kill.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Comment from ujbhurtah
The picture and the poem perfectly match together. During the war we are united as one nation, like brothers in arms. Very good job and inspirational poem about unity in war. It should especially be dedicated to all soldiers from USA who go to fight in difficult countries such as Iran, Afghanistan, Syria, etc. a beautiful homage for American troops!
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The picture and the poem perfectly match together. During the war we are united as one nation, like brothers in arms. Very good job and inspirational poem about unity in war. It should especially be dedicated to all soldiers from USA who go to fight in difficult countries such as Iran, Afghanistan, Syria, etc. a beautiful homage for American troops!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Comment from Christine B.
I'd be a fool to chime in about the torment faced by those in combat without first stating that it is all absolutely obvious. Wars, wars, wars; even the echo of them, sounding in fields soaked in bloodshed, is baffling. The potential that leaves our world when people are killed as a result of shallow instruction. Yours is a fine, respectful write.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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I'd be a fool to chime in about the torment faced by those in combat without first stating that it is all absolutely obvious. Wars, wars, wars; even the echo of them, sounding in fields soaked in bloodshed, is baffling. The potential that leaves our world when people are killed as a result of shallow instruction. Yours is a fine, respectful write.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ...
... a fitting tribute with much poise and reflection with a good hook and counter conclusion drawing on the emotions and deelivering with a pack and punch Pam would have liked ... as far as corrections none needed and quite outstanding and sweet in its sentiment and the picture suits the mood and relevance.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Excellent ...
... a fitting tribute with much poise and reflection with a good hook and counter conclusion drawing on the emotions and deelivering with a pack and punch Pam would have liked ... as far as corrections none needed and quite outstanding and sweet in its sentiment and the picture suits the mood and relevance.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you Bicpen