Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "What of this journey"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Willowsong
This piece was emulsified in layers of imagery and riddled with thought provoking concepts.
"Tormented spirits divested" (made me ponder, what more
could be stripped away)
"Illusion crust" (left me with the image of Dante's
Inferno & the nine circles of Hell)
Brilliant image that compliments your words completely. My hat off to you :D
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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This piece was emulsified in layers of imagery and riddled with thought provoking concepts.
"Tormented spirits divested" (made me ponder, what more
could be stripped away)
"Illusion crust" (left me with the image of Dante's
Inferno & the nine circles of Hell)
Brilliant image that compliments your words completely. My hat off to you :D
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thank you again for the review and 6
Gary
Comment from semtex
A bit deppressing.
Not the sort of work that I enjoy reading or Thinking about. But its okay as gobbledigook Or a work of self pity. Semtex
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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A bit deppressing.
Not the sort of work that I enjoy reading or Thinking about. But its okay as gobbledigook Or a work of self pity. Semtex
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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your point?
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A wonderfully penned free verse poem. Very strong imagery. T question at the end leaves a thought for the reader to ponder. Well done, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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A wonderfully penned free verse poem. Very strong imagery. T question at the end leaves a thought for the reader to ponder. Well done, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you for the review Debbie
Comment from chasennov
"What of this journey" What a most excellent poem you have created here. Emotional, lovelorn, depression, evocative, and very expressive. Absolutely well done.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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"What of this journey" What a most excellent poem you have created here. Emotional, lovelorn, depression, evocative, and very expressive. Absolutely well done.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you for this review
Gary
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You are most welcome, Gary.
Comment from Bill Schott
This vision of purgatory is loaded with the loss, trauma, bitterness, and sorrow I have always pictured it to be. Between the lofty text and amazing image I am very taken with this poem.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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This vision of purgatory is loaded with the loss, trauma, bitterness, and sorrow I have always pictured it to be. Between the lofty text and amazing image I am very taken with this poem.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you Bill for your review and 6
Gary
Comment from adewpearl
effective touches of alliteration
like in rest revisited and spiritual sensuality
good word choices like traumatized, eternal hellfire, tormented spirits...to create a doleful mood
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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effective touches of alliteration
like in rest revisited and spiritual sensuality
good word choices like traumatized, eternal hellfire, tormented spirits...to create a doleful mood
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Brooke
Gary
Comment from dennis0530
This piece is written with a somber mood. The author's use of "Our soul" refers to a collective spirit of humankind.
It is a pleading and hoping for a reformed revival.
"Karma returns..." - what goes around comes around. It is cleansing as much as it is punishing. I see this as trials in life's journey. We might as well "rise as the phoenix" while we are still here.
Since life is a shift between trials and errors, it might be well considered that heaven, hell and purgatory are here on earth. Depending on our circumstances, this is not hard to accept.
The writer's questioned hoping of "can we rise as the phoenix?" can be possibly achieved through individual efforts resulting in a common good for all.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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This piece is written with a somber mood. The author's use of "Our soul" refers to a collective spirit of humankind.
It is a pleading and hoping for a reformed revival.
"Karma returns..." - what goes around comes around. It is cleansing as much as it is punishing. I see this as trials in life's journey. We might as well "rise as the phoenix" while we are still here.
Since life is a shift between trials and errors, it might be well considered that heaven, hell and purgatory are here on earth. Depending on our circumstances, this is not hard to accept.
The writer's questioned hoping of "can we rise as the phoenix?" can be possibly achieved through individual efforts resulting in a common good for all.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you dennis for this review you are right
Comment from JavaJunkie
Beautifully written and excellent end crafted! The cadence/ rhythym of this piece is very pleasing to read. It has a spoken word feel to it that I really enjoyed.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Beautifully written and excellent end crafted! The cadence/ rhythym of this piece is very pleasing to read. It has a spoken word feel to it that I really enjoyed.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Java
Comment from Joan E.
Your artwork certainly is captivating! Your vivid, dark descriptions do not hold out much hope for our rising "as the phoenix"! Best wishes- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Your artwork certainly is captivating! Your vivid, dark descriptions do not hold out much hope for our rising "as the phoenix"! Best wishes- Joan
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Tonulak
I thought this poem was full of imagery and ran rather freely, unrestrained by liniarity. The "hand of fate" and phoenix" are rather overused symbols, yet there was a lot of passion here. Nice job--Ted
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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I thought this poem was full of imagery and ran rather freely, unrestrained by liniarity. The "hand of fate" and phoenix" are rather overused symbols, yet there was a lot of passion here. Nice job--Ted
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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thanks Ted