Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "October Morn"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from lola29
Your poem is very heartrending. It's always sad to have to say goodbye. You seem to have a good head on your shoulders for leadership.
reply by the author on 29-May-2010
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Your poem is very heartrending. It's always sad to have to say goodbye. You seem to have a good head on your shoulders for leadership.
Comment Written 29-May-2010
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thank you lola
Comment from Valkarie
I like this because...It tells a story which flows so well is concise and most powerful of men who fight to keep our freedom. An inspiring piece that is most visual in description and has a good balance. An artistic write.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 29-May-2010
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I like this because...It tells a story which flows so well is concise and most powerful of men who fight to keep our freedom. An inspiring piece that is most visual in description and has a good balance. An artistic write.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 29-May-2010
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thank you Valkarie
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Your very welcome.
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
What price have we paid during life , that others may carry on? Will I be remembered for good or evil or not at all? Your poem is a grim reminder that if we choose the wrong path while living, we will have died in vein, but if we choose the path of righteousness we will wear the crown of heavenly glory.
Than you for another insightful examination of the life we lived.
Well done! Thank you for sharing.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
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What price have we paid during life , that others may carry on? Will I be remembered for good or evil or not at all? Your poem is a grim reminder that if we choose the wrong path while living, we will have died in vein, but if we choose the path of righteousness we will wear the crown of heavenly glory.
Than you for another insightful examination of the life we lived.
Well done! Thank you for sharing.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
Comment Written 29-May-2010
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thank you Roger aka Marilyn's partner thanks for reading GW
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice piece of reflective poetry that raises some crucial itrospective questions about this life. It is important to attempt finding answers to these questions from time to time so that we do not live a wasted life. kudos
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This is a nice piece of reflective poetry that raises some crucial itrospective questions about this life. It is important to attempt finding answers to these questions from time to time so that we do not live a wasted life. kudos
Comment Written 29-May-2010
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thank you Perp for reading
Comment from patmedium
Once again, the true demonstration of the true poet. The soul who has the ability to imagine and don other shoes. Thankyou for sharing thisd one with us. Pat.
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Once again, the true demonstration of the true poet. The soul who has the ability to imagine and don other shoes. Thankyou for sharing thisd one with us. Pat.
Comment Written 29-May-2010
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thank you Pat for reading
Comment from jaeladarling
A great read, filled with memory and wonder. Good form and style, and well-deserving of both ribbons. Thanks for sharing with us - I look forward to reading more of your work. Cheers!
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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A great read, filled with memory and wonder. Good form and style, and well-deserving of both ribbons. Thanks for sharing with us - I look forward to reading more of your work. Cheers!
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you Jae
Comment from Chuck23
You're a very talented poet, deepwater! I enjoyed reading this poem. I don't remember reading a poem quite like this before, where one is speaking of their own end. Felt it brought about much to reflect on!
Thank you for sharing your poetry!
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You're a very talented poet, deepwater! I enjoyed reading this poem. I don't remember reading a poem quite like this before, where one is speaking of their own end. Felt it brought about much to reflect on!
Thank you for sharing your poetry!
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading Chuck
Comment from skye
This is a contemplative and introspective poem about the last days and the endings of familliar things.
Well constructed.
Enjoyable.
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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This is a contemplative and introspective poem about the last days and the endings of familliar things.
Well constructed.
Enjoyable.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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thank you for reading Skye
Comment from Earthwriter
beatiffuly written my friend tis so true expectations we set early on are sometimes unrealistic well written piece and the color enhanced
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beatiffuly written my friend tis so true expectations we set early on are sometimes unrealistic well written piece and the color enhanced
Comment Written 27-May-2010
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thank you Earthwriter for reading
Comment from Helen Tan
I enjoyed the tone of this poem, thanks.
History will tell of great men who fell, but what of us that did follow?
This line hits me the most. We remember the leaders but a war is fought by the masses, many who lost their lives or contributed so much more. It's sad that they sacrified their lives yet are faceless and nameless in history pages. They are but a cumulative number.
Now comes the time to lay me down on this cold October morn_
But now comes the time to lay me down on this cold October morn
When I read the first line, I had the sense of a man lying down, remembering his past but as I read on , I realise this is the voice of a deceased. The repeat of the first line in the last rounds this poem well. There's a dignified moment of respect at the end for this man who gave his life for his country.
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I enjoyed the tone of this poem, thanks.
History will tell of great men who fell, but what of us that did follow?
This line hits me the most. We remember the leaders but a war is fought by the masses, many who lost their lives or contributed so much more. It's sad that they sacrified their lives yet are faceless and nameless in history pages. They are but a cumulative number.
Now comes the time to lay me down on this cold October morn_
But now comes the time to lay me down on this cold October morn
When I read the first line, I had the sense of a man lying down, remembering his past but as I read on , I realise this is the voice of a deceased. The repeat of the first line in the last rounds this poem well. There's a dignified moment of respect at the end for this man who gave his life for his country.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
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thank you for reading Helen