Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Part Two Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from jclark
I think what I enjoy most about your writing is the character development. You always have a strong male who does the "white knight" thing for our heroine. You also create just the right amount of drama to make me nervous as your "bad guy" begins to unravel. Always leaves me anxious to see what's next. Good chapter!
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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I think what I enjoy most about your writing is the character development. You always have a strong male who does the "white knight" thing for our heroine. You also create just the right amount of drama to make me nervous as your "bad guy" begins to unravel. Always leaves me anxious to see what's next. Good chapter!
Judy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your encouraging words and kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
this jerk tried to blame me for Mom's death - capitalize Mom
I'm glad you didn't lose this post, Barbara - this is an excellent chapter. Through the dialogue you develop Troy's character effectively while also providing back story naturally.
I'm eager to read more. Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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this jerk tried to blame me for Mom's death - capitalize Mom
I'm glad you didn't lose this post, Barbara - this is an excellent chapter. Through the dialogue you develop Troy's character effectively while also providing back story naturally.
I'm eager to read more. Brooke
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and catching my error. I am off to correct it.
Comment from dinoscribe
I think this is a smooth read. It flows very well indeed.
I have to say that this is not my usual type of read but I read this through twice, and went back to read the first chapter.
The crux of this story is a harsh reality to many; I believe you have handled it with sensitivity and compassion.
I feel for Anna as I would anyone in the same situation.
If only we could all have a white knight!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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I think this is a smooth read. It flows very well indeed.
I have to say that this is not my usual type of read but I read this through twice, and went back to read the first chapter.
The crux of this story is a harsh reality to many; I believe you have handled it with sensitivity and compassion.
I feel for Anna as I would anyone in the same situation.
If only we could all have a white knight!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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White nights are only in Romance Novels, that the whole problem. I hope Anna's white nigth will help her out of this abusive marriage. I can promise you, it will get worse for Anna before it gets better. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Troy does have demons he's fighting, but with good reason. I'm glad he is now offering help to anyone who needs it, because of what he went through, and glad Anna took his business card. She'll need his help. This chapter is becoming more interesting and I like the suspense it has.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Troy does have demons he's fighting, but with good reason. I'm glad he is now offering help to anyone who needs it, because of what he went through, and glad Anna took his business card. She'll need his help. This chapter is becoming more interesting and I like the suspense it has.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragaing words.
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You're welcome. Keep up the excellent writing. Michelle
Comment from Kelly Shackelford
This is a well written piece and much needed in this time. Thank you for delving into this subject and shedding light on it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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This is a well written piece and much needed in this time. Thank you for delving into this subject and shedding light on it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
Hey there. i think this willl be a very good book. The oly thing, I hope he's like a counsler or something, becuase he is very quick and free with very personal info. This something it takes people years to share, if ever.
In your background notes
or are their struggles too much to over come? (overcome)
She adjusted the sweeter (sweater) sleeve covering her lower right arm, before she entered his office.
That's all I found. Great job.
hugs Book
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Hey there. i think this willl be a very good book. The oly thing, I hope he's like a counsler or something, becuase he is very quick and free with very personal info. This something it takes people years to share, if ever.
In your background notes
or are their struggles too much to over come? (overcome)
She adjusted the sweeter (sweater) sleeve covering her lower right arm, before she entered his office.
That's all I found. Great job.
hugs Book
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank your catching my stupid mistakes. I hate making them. I appreciate your eagle eye.
Comment from Writeaway...
Barbara, nice to see you again I haven't read from you for a while, another great chapter add to this book. You held my interest from beginning to end and I couldn't spot out any spags, an excellent job all computers come with glitches, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Barbara, nice to see you again I haven't read from you for a while, another great chapter add to this book. You held my interest from beginning to end and I couldn't spot out any spags, an excellent job all computers come with glitches, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate the support.
Comment from jadapenn
Ah, that ended before I was finished being involved. Poor Anna. How does one break away from these situations? Such men should be locked away for good so others like them can get to them.
I like Troy. He seems the solid and kind type. I hope things work out here.
Well written, girlfriend. luv jada
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Ah, that ended before I was finished being involved. Poor Anna. How does one break away from these situations? Such men should be locked away for good so others like them can get to them.
I like Troy. He seems the solid and kind type. I hope things work out here.
Well written, girlfriend. luv jada
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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I hope Troy isn't fooling this poor lady. She deserves some thing better. Thank you for the kind review. Hows the storm????
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Bad lighting - hit our beautiful Queen Palm at the swimming pool and set it alight. Still raining buckets this morning. Ugh. Gotta go to work. luv jada
Comment from c_lucas
At least Troy did not belt Bobby. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. You're doing a good job with character development.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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At least Troy did not belt Bobby. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. You're doing a good job with character development.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Bobby and Troy never meet in this post. They will soon enough. Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie