Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Part one Chapter four"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Excellent scene. Direct and straight forward. Very much how a conversation would go in real life. Below is one OOP.
He took over his uncles business and is self-employed.
[uncles SHOULD BE uncle's]
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Excellent scene. Direct and straight forward. Very much how a conversation would go in real life. Below is one OOP.
He took over his uncles business and is self-employed.
[uncles SHOULD BE uncle's]
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thanks for the eagle eye. I will take care of it.
Comment from adewpearl
You relate her back story in a compelling way, showing how her toxic relationship started and progressed.
He took over his uncle's business - add apostrophe for possessive
She really shouldn't have to worry to much about supporting herself and one child on that salary, now that she would not be spending any money on Bobby. Brooke
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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You relate her back story in a compelling way, showing how her toxic relationship started and progressed.
He took over his uncle's business - add apostrophe for possessive
She really shouldn't have to worry to much about supporting herself and one child on that salary, now that she would not be spending any money on Bobby. Brooke
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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I have already taken care of my little issue with the apostrophe. I agree but she's used to being broke because Bobby handled all the money, that will come out soon. Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from c_lucas
You did an excellent job of filling the reader with Troy's childhood and Anna's marital changs for the worst. This is very well written. Good job.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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You did an excellent job of filling the reader with Troy's childhood and Anna's marital changs for the worst. This is very well written. Good job.
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Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Happy Mother's Day. Charlie