Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Part 1 Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations on getting a new computer; I had to do the same and then figure everything out again as well. This chapter is like a detective story and I figured the Collier woman must be with a "safe haven" group. (About 30 lines from the end, I think the word "father" is missing from the sentence "Troy watched his leave.") Thank you for adding the notes about the rationalizations the abuse use. -Joan
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Congratulations on getting a new computer; I had to do the same and then figure everything out again as well. This chapter is like a detective story and I figured the Collier woman must be with a "safe haven" group. (About 30 lines from the end, I think the word "father" is missing from the sentence "Troy watched his leave.") Thank you for adding the notes about the rationalizations the abuse use. -Joan
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I iwll fix that. Thank you for catching it.
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Glad I could be helpful. Hope to see you in your next chapter. -Joan
Comment from MS Writer
Your notes are wonderful and helpful to many people I'm sure. People who have not experience this abuse have trouble understanding why the women stay. Thanks for sharing this information. It will be helpful to everyone. This is a worthwhile, well written story.
Michele
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Your notes are wonderful and helpful to many people I'm sure. People who have not experience this abuse have trouble understanding why the women stay. Thanks for sharing this information. It will be helpful to everyone. This is a worthwhile, well written story.
Michele
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your wonderful support. I appreciate it.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
I love this story and your notes.That you put up the number for any with enough life left to try. My mom chose 4 husbands after my dad. They all cheated drank,and beat her. The one she was married to the longest shot her and my uncle,when I was 12. She forgave him. I lived with her for 9 months,and said get me out,or I'll get myself out. She took my bro. and I to Akron and within a week left and went back to him.She stayed with him till I was 19. He then shot her in the head with a 38,hollow point bullet. She miracously survived.She finally left him after that. He served 42 months. There are all kinds of abuse,and I think it is wonderful,that you are writing this story. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I love this story and your notes.That you put up the number for any with enough life left to try. My mom chose 4 husbands after my dad. They all cheated drank,and beat her. The one she was married to the longest shot her and my uncle,when I was 12. She forgave him. I lived with her for 9 months,and said get me out,or I'll get myself out. She took my bro. and I to Akron and within a week left and went back to him.She stayed with him till I was 19. He then shot her in the head with a 38,hollow point bullet. She miracously survived.She finally left him after that. He served 42 months. There are all kinds of abuse,and I think it is wonderful,that you are writing this story. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for sharing your story. I don't have any answers but I feel the story should be told. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I would give you another six if I had it. Your chapters are great reading. You draw me right into the story. Great job as always.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I would give you another six if I had it. Your chapters are great reading. You draw me right into the story. Great job as always.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Your virtual six. It means a lot to me.
Comment from rchitwood
You missed one if he's an acholic the fear if you leave he'll die. Knowing the children love their Dad and living with the guilt,if he does die. This story is very good and it needs to be told. Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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You missed one if he's an acholic the fear if you leave he'll die. Knowing the children love their Dad and living with the guilt,if he does die. This story is very good and it needs to be told. Blessings Rita
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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There are many reasons for staying. One reviewer last week added that he threatened to kill her family and friends if she left him. Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from c_lucas
You're story is coming along nicely. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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You're story is coming along nicely. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review and the support you give me.
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You're welcome, Barbara. You have earned the sixer. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
Not really, but see that volunteer? - add question mark
A fascinating chapter as it appears Anna has gone underground. I do hope they locate her before her husband decides to have her charged with kidnapping.
Good dialogue throughout. Brooke
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Not really, but see that volunteer? - add question mark
A fascinating chapter as it appears Anna has gone underground. I do hope they locate her before her husband decides to have her charged with kidnapping.
Good dialogue throughout. Brooke
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I took a hit on my last post, I was told I use too much dialogue. I said, I would keep doing it unless a publisher or editor told me to not too. Thank you for your kind review and I will fix that ?
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You really never can satisfy everyone - use less dialogue and someone different will tell you there isn't enough LOL