Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from HAWordsmith
...and this is why I became a fan. LOL Well-written, a good story line; I didn't think it long at all, in fact, would have liked to a little more to each of the scenes. Even though, you did an excellent job in making me despise that worthless crumb as his mom. Thank you for the post.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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...and this is why I became a fan. LOL Well-written, a good story line; I didn't think it long at all, in fact, would have liked to a little more to each of the scenes. Even though, you did an excellent job in making me despise that worthless crumb as his mom. Thank you for the post.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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you're welcome, and I meant that worthless crumb AND his mom. :)
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I understood
Comment from adewpearl
I would rather error on the side of caution - err
When Mrs. Rodgers disobeyed your orders and took her son to the doctor, - add comma
Mr. Young, would care to rebuttal? - would you care to rebut?
or - do you have a rebuttal?
restraining order in affect - in effect
it would be beneficiary to both parties - beneficial
The attorney's went - drop the apostrophe
usually the petitioner, which would be me - add comma
You make the trial sound extremely realistic and you have great character development of the crazed mother-in-law :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I would rather error on the side of caution - err
When Mrs. Rodgers disobeyed your orders and took her son to the doctor, - add comma
Mr. Young, would care to rebuttal? - would you care to rebut?
or - do you have a rebuttal?
restraining order in affect - in effect
it would be beneficiary to both parties - beneficial
The attorney's went - drop the apostrophe
usually the petitioner, which would be me - add comma
You make the trial sound extremely realistic and you have great character development of the crazed mother-in-law :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I even checked my notes on the comma for which and I still missed it, darn!!!!!!! Thank you for your help and the review.
Comment from mumsyone
Interesting chapter, with the trial not being too long and drawn out.
"Mr. Young, would (you?) care to rebuttal?"
The attorney's (attorneys) went to their respective tables and the session was over.
In the courthouse's (courthouse) hallway,
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Interesting chapter, with the trial not being too long and drawn out.
"Mr. Young, would (you?) care to rebuttal?"
The attorney's (attorneys) went to their respective tables and the session was over.
In the courthouse's (courthouse) hallway,
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I have made those changes, thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb Great chapter--
Good you finally got us into the court room
It looks like a real good thing for Anna after I read wht he attorney was asking booby and the answers he gave to me are very favorable for Anna.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Hello Barb Great chapter--
Good you finally got us into the court room
It looks like a real good thing for Anna after I read wht he attorney was asking booby and the answers he gave to me are very favorable for Anna.
Gert
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I thought you did a great job on this one Barbara.
It had a deep powerful in court feel about it and I thought you did your character strengths really well.
Well done, I enjoyed reading it and see how the story has progressed.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I thought you did a great job on this one Barbara.
It had a deep powerful in court feel about it and I thought you did your character strengths really well.
Well done, I enjoyed reading it and see how the story has progressed.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
Miss Barbara these chapters always so compelling
Well written.... and on such a subject so many have and deal with
I've had my share.. the numbers on the bottom always touch me
You never know who may truly need them
Thanks for sharing.......
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Miss Barbara these chapters always so compelling
Well written.... and on such a subject so many have and deal with
I've had my share.. the numbers on the bottom always touch me
You never know who may truly need them
Thanks for sharing.......
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter where bobby called his beating a discipline in order to teach her proper behavior. how did you know about the different rulings?
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter where bobby called his beating a discipline in order to teach her proper behavior. how did you know about the different rulings?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I have a lawyer friend. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
There seems to be some animosity brewing on Bobby's side. His Mother is trying to protect him. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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There seems to be some animosity brewing on Bobby's side. His Mother is trying to protect him. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie