Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Creation Sleeps"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Something of a double entente here, it seems to me.
I like it, whichever way we read it.
Poignant and searching question which really does get to the heart of the matter - whichever way we read it.
Warmly,
Juliette
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Something of a double entente here, it seems to me.
I like it, whichever way we read it.
Poignant and searching question which really does get to the heart of the matter - whichever way we read it.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from ravenblack
I'm sorry, but this is two sentences- good sentences, but not really a poem. And if you are going to post two sentences, you really have to get every word right. "Will we awake" - not the correct conjugation. It should read, "will we waken".
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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I'm sorry, but this is two sentences- good sentences, but not really a poem. And if you are going to post two sentences, you really have to get every word right. "Will we awake" - not the correct conjugation. It should read, "will we waken".
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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"Will we awake" is the way I like thanks
Comment from NurseBarb
A short writing, however so powerful of a message. A message that appears to be saying to live each day as if it were your last. Beautiful image to accompany this as well.
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A short writing, however so powerful of a message. A message that appears to be saying to live each day as if it were your last. Beautiful image to accompany this as well.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Zinnia48
Wow! It's such a brief poem, but the powerful grouping of these strong images gives quite an impact! I am particularly touched by this phrase: "through tired eyes of pure mortals." Thanks! Caroline
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Wow! It's such a brief poem, but the powerful grouping of these strong images gives quite an impact! I am particularly touched by this phrase: "through tired eyes of pure mortals." Thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in last look and pure perfection and in sun or sleep
good consonance of W sounds in will we awake
your haunting question reminds me of the prayer I said every night as a child - if I should die before I wake...
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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good alliteration in last look and pure perfection and in sun or sleep
good consonance of W sounds in will we awake
your haunting question reminds me of the prayer I said every night as a child - if I should die before I wake...
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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thank you Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
In your title, did you mean to mis-spell "Perfection?" Men fall short of being perfect. This is very well written with a smoth flow of words.
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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In your title, did you mean to mis-spell "Perfection?" Men fall short of being perfect. This is very well written with a smoth flow of words.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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sorry the title was Creation Sleeps have changed
Gary
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I review the work, nor the title, Gary. Charlie