Writings From the Heart
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Comment from skye
Remarkable poem about first love. Your free verse is smooth, filled with rhymes, beautiful cadences, and a magical feeling of what love can and should be.
Very well done.
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Remarkable poem about first love. Your free verse is smooth, filled with rhymes, beautiful cadences, and a magical feeling of what love can and should be.
Very well done.
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thank you Skye
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading every word. It's passion and sensual, yet very innocent. I really enjoy those poems. Good job.
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This poem is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading every word. It's passion and sensual, yet very innocent. I really enjoy those poems. Good job.
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thank you Barbara
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse touches on the many splendors of the "awe of submission" and the "memories of first night". So much of this time is firsts and lasts and pleasant experiences.
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This free verse touches on the many splendors of the "awe of submission" and the "memories of first night". So much of this time is firsts and lasts and pleasant experiences.
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thanks Bill
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi deepwater - This is a lovely free verse about first love. I, and I would think everyone, can identify with this. Who can forget their first love? Your words are lovely, and so right for the subject - 'Our bodies charged from endless tease' - a really good phrase. A perfect last line - and the whole poem an injection of nostalgia. Good luck in the contest. Kine regards Dorothy x
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Hi deepwater - This is a lovely free verse about first love. I, and I would think everyone, can identify with this. Who can forget their first love? Your words are lovely, and so right for the subject - 'Our bodies charged from endless tease' - a really good phrase. A perfect last line - and the whole poem an injection of nostalgia. Good luck in the contest. Kine regards Dorothy x
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thank you Dorothy
Comment from Kingsland
I'm not a big fan of romantic poetry, as I find most of them overwritten and cheesy. But this one is neither overwritten or cheesy. It is written in subtle thoughts that flourish in phrases of emotional poetic verve. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
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I'm not a big fan of romantic poetry, as I find most of them overwritten and cheesy. But this one is neither overwritten or cheesy. It is written in subtle thoughts that flourish in phrases of emotional poetic verve. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
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thank you John
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
This is very well written. The lines read smoothly and the idea of rhyming the lines a little was a good one.
Good Luck!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
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Hello there~!
This is very well written. The lines read smoothly and the idea of rhyming the lines a little was a good one.
Good Luck!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
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Thank you for this
Comment from Bryan G
Your poem beautifully captures the images of the first night of love. The fragrance that lingers with the whispers of love fill the heart with the beauty of first love. The endless tease and the intimacy of the first night stir the mind to remember first love and memories of the night. Well done.
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Your poem beautifully captures the images of the first night of love. The fragrance that lingers with the whispers of love fill the heart with the beauty of first love. The endless tease and the intimacy of the first night stir the mind to remember first love and memories of the night. Well done.
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Again thank you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Fragrance of First Night' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
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'Fragrance of First Night' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
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Thank you
deepwater, you're very welcome :-)the Duchess
Comment from scd41
Your smooth sailing verse brought back some romance and nostalgia to my mind about the first night after wedding. It appeared a bit unrealistic in the context of common dating practice prior to getting engaged that virginity would have a chance to survive till the first night. Nevertheless, your entry is a good one. All the best!
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Your smooth sailing verse brought back some romance and nostalgia to my mind about the first night after wedding. It appeared a bit unrealistic in the context of common dating practice prior to getting engaged that virginity would have a chance to survive till the first night. Nevertheless, your entry is a good one. All the best!
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Thank you
Comment from dragonpoet
What a romantic rendering of a first night of a honeymoon. I say this because of the gold ring mentioned. The both yearn for each other like two that kept chaste before marriage.
I like the rhyme in the middle of the poem. Especially the triplet which shows it is true and pure love.
This love is as beautiful and open as the rose.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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What a romantic rendering of a first night of a honeymoon. I say this because of the gold ring mentioned. The both yearn for each other like two that kept chaste before marriage.
I like the rhyme in the middle of the poem. Especially the triplet which shows it is true and pure love.
This love is as beautiful and open as the rose.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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You're welcome, Gary.
Joan
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You're welcome, Gary.
Joan
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You're welcome, Gary.
Joan