Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I leave this Note "A book of Poetry & Writing
104 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
Hi . I like that both sides our prtrayed here. Cannon fodder never gets to think, and yet all bleed. Any way is stupid. The first one the loss of innocence...but not the learning of a better way.
pc
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Hi . I like that both sides our prtrayed here. Cannon fodder never gets to think, and yet all bleed. Any way is stupid. The first one the loss of innocence...but not the learning of a better way.
pc
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from OLA THOMAS
This is wonderful stating the ills of wars from two perspectives and concluding with a balanced submission. Ummh! When is the world going to stop these senseless wars.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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This is wonderful stating the ills of wars from two perspectives and concluding with a balanced submission. Ummh! When is the world going to stop these senseless wars.
ola thomas
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you OLA
Comment from Eric1
Hi Gary, a great and original way to depict the horrors of the first world war, the same letter from both men emphasises thefact that neither of them knew what they were fighting for, or wanted to be there. Brilliant writing as usual with a great flow and good rhythm.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Hi Gary, a great and original way to depict the horrors of the first world war, the same letter from both men emphasises thefact that neither of them knew what they were fighting for, or wanted to be there. Brilliant writing as usual with a great flow and good rhythm.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thank you Eric for this review
Gary
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You are Welcome Gary.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Typical though fantastic is this
ww1 gem. I could read such poetry
all day and not become tired. Of
late we are remembering those who
were killed in a war which didn't
end any wars. A great read with a
clear message. Eric
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Typical though fantastic is this
ww1 gem. I could read such poetry
all day and not become tired. Of
late we are remembering those who
were killed in a war which didn't
end any wars. A great read with a
clear message. Eric
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this review and the six Eric
Gary
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My pleasure
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello again
I love this poem because the meter and feel of it pull the reader into the next line and stanza.
war is hell for sure. Mothers did and still do cry
Bear
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Hello again
I love this poem because the meter and feel of it pull the reader into the next line and stanza.
war is hell for sure. Mothers did and still do cry
Bear
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Bear
Comment from Dom G Robles
This poem flowed freely. I loved reading it from beginning to end. The rhyme and rhythm is excellent as far as I am concerned. The structure was well organized. It talks of soldiers in the firing line,possibly during the World War I where the British and the Germans fought mightily in the front lines. There is one, however, which I think is a typo error. The last part which says: "The time has come, BOYONETED, "Bayonet," (I think), "in hand over..." The poem presented strong images. Congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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This poem flowed freely. I loved reading it from beginning to end. The rhyme and rhythm is excellent as far as I am concerned. The structure was well organized. It talks of soldiers in the firing line,possibly during the World War I where the British and the Germans fought mightily in the front lines. There is one, however, which I think is a typo error. The last part which says: "The time has come, BOYONETED, "Bayonet," (I think), "in hand over..." The poem presented strong images. Congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Dom
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Welcome. Dom
Comment from Maggieluv
Great portrayal of the horror of war and examined from both sides. The black and white conjured up old documentaries for me and brought the awful horror if war home - did you follow a particular rhythm? Great tribute to our lost heroes!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Great portrayal of the horror of war and examined from both sides. The black and white conjured up old documentaries for me and brought the awful horror if war home - did you follow a particular rhythm? Great tribute to our lost heroes!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Maggie no rhythm no side
Gary
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. When WWI stagnated the killing went on with no relief in sight until Attrition took its toll.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. When WWI stagnated the killing went on with no relief in sight until Attrition took its toll.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Mr C
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie
Comment from Dean Kuch
Shades of All's Quiet on the Western Front, a wonderfully written book by Erich Maria Remarque, a German veteran of World War I.
Two notes, one from a young German soldier, and one from a British soldier. Two notes which say exactly the same, poignant sentimental lines, save one for King, and one for Kaiser. That in and of itself should clearly depict how very alike soldiers from both sides of the trenches and the barbed wire truly were. They had a duty to perform for God and country, and they fought bravely to accomplish their superior's goals and objectives. For many, in one of the bloodiest battles in history, it ultimately cost them their lives.
I enjoyed the many references to the "fields so wet and gray", Gary.
Another well written poem depicting the horrors of WWI, and war in general, told from both sides of the battlefield.
Good work!~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Shades of All's Quiet on the Western Front, a wonderfully written book by Erich Maria Remarque, a German veteran of World War I.
Two notes, one from a young German soldier, and one from a British soldier. Two notes which say exactly the same, poignant sentimental lines, save one for King, and one for Kaiser. That in and of itself should clearly depict how very alike soldiers from both sides of the trenches and the barbed wire truly were. They had a duty to perform for God and country, and they fought bravely to accomplish their superior's goals and objectives. For many, in one of the bloodiest battles in history, it ultimately cost them their lives.
I enjoyed the many references to the "fields so wet and gray", Gary.
Another well written poem depicting the horrors of WWI, and war in general, told from both sides of the battlefield.
Good work!~Dean
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Dean
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No worries, mate. The pleasure was all mine.
Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello Deepwater!
This beautifully written piece of poetry was a fantastic read. I truly feel this earned my full 6 stars since that's how great I thought it was. Again, your style of writing is so unique!! Best of luck my friend. This will do very well....xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Hello Deepwater!
This beautifully written piece of poetry was a fantastic read. I truly feel this earned my full 6 stars since that's how great I thought it was. Again, your style of writing is so unique!! Best of luck my friend. This will do very well....xoxo
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Heidi
Gary