Comment from Karyn2

Excellent

Hello! I came by for a visit of some children's poetry. Writing poetry and stories in rhyme for children is my dream. I've written quite a few along the way and maybe just one day I might get something published. I've been on Fanstory for just two weeks and finding my feet but I haven't posted much in the way of my children's poetry or stories as I didn't know how they would be received. So here I am checking out other works! I loved this delightful story and easy flow rhyme. Timmy and Tommy are adorable and the telling of the Christmas story through their eyes is sweet. Thanks for the read and inspiring me to pop some of mine up.. in the not too distant future.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022

Hi Karyn, welcome to Fanstory! It's nice to have another children's author on here. I've written loads, and through the lovely, helpful reviews I've a few published. I'll wait and have a read of yours when you post. I've written them in prose and rhyme. My latest was a poem story with pictures to colour. It's such fun. Enjoy your writing, and have fun. Thank you so much for the nice review of mine. Warm hugs, Sandra

Comment from moongirlwriter

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, This of course is an older post but the story is still fresh and new as is every story about Christmas and the Baby Jesus. I found myself reading then jumped right in to making myself a part of the story. I love that when it happens. . .and it's almost a must to be a successful pre-school teacher at story time. Absolutely delightful. :)

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022

What a lovely review, Moongirl, (What is your name?) I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Timmy and Tommy mouse feature in many of my older childrens books. I had a lot of fun with them. I thought it was a good idea to give the children another side to the Christmas Story. I've not done anything with this one yet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. And thank you for the golden nugget!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

reply by moongirlwriter on 01-Jun-2022

My name is Dee Hale, Ms Dee in the pre-school world and since I was born in July, I took on the name "moongirl writer". I love writing in rhyme, I love reading children's stories out loud in rhyme. I have a kind of melodic lyrical voice quality so my voice works really well for kids.
Not bursting any buttons here, this was just a gift God gave me. . .and it's fun to make books come alive for kids with my voice. :)

reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022

You are so lucky, my mouth dries up when I'm reading aloud now. I was invited to several schools to read some of my childrens poem-stories, and I really enjoyed doing that, then answering all the questions they had for me. But, my voice is not what it was, it's a bit croaky now!! Lol. I was also asked by a big department store, John Lewis, to read my first Christmas story, (The Night Before Christmas Eve) They took my photo and put it on a large poster to advertise I would be there to read it to the children. Talk about nervous!! Now I don't do it at all. My voice has gone due to too many asthma attacks. You should start doing that, you are used to teaching pre schoolers, so you'll have no trouble reading them a story. Libraries are another place to go and read to children. Go for it, for a start it will get your name out there. xx

reply by moongirlwriter on 01-Jun-2022

I'm feeling like I'm one era short because I did pursue that for a while.
It is still something I would LOVE to do and I do think about it. There are so many people with read out loud programs on YouTube. . .some are good some, not so good. I used to go to my granddaughters primary school during Dr. Suess' week (she's now 16). I would read aloud to represent her class. Then one time when I was waiting, the lady next to me said she was there to hear someone read to the kids because she was told, they were just really great. I soon realized she was talking about me!!! Then I was really nervous! Before that. . .it was always just about the kids. Too funny.
In the US, they have library staff do a Children's story time. Still I could do a kind of volunteer program called "Grandma's visit" though and just see how many schools might be willing to let me come. . .especially when I will have my own books to read! That would make my day. Thinking, thinking, thinking. :)

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Amazing! This is clever in every way possible. An enchanting back story to the birth of baby Jesus told by father mouse to his sons. I adored this piece and as a writer of children's rhymes, I'd love for you to critique: (Bronze oak in the corn) for me and tell me what you think and where I can improve. I applaud you on this piece of writing, Sandra.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022

Thank you so much, John, I'm glad you enjoyed my Christmas story. I've written loads with my mice and their friends. I've been over to your portfolio and read your poem, it's delightful. Thank you for searching mine out. Warm hugs, Sandra

Comment from DeboraDyess

Exceptional

Girl, this was so delightful! You told the story of Christ's birth through the eyes of the animals who were there. I loved it!
Why haven't you published all the shorts together as a book?
I'll help... after I get your illustrations to you! lol
LOVED it, loved it, loved it.
Blessings and chat soon,
Deb

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2021

Thank you so much, dear Debs! It came second in the contest, so I'm well pleased with that. I will publish another childrens book with these short stories, when I have a few more done. Now, I have just posted a prologue for my new novel. It is a bit on the sexy side, but the story isn't, it's more a mystery romance. The prologue is to get my heroine ready for what will be going on in her life. I hope you'll follow it with me. Love and hugs, dear friend, and a happy new year!! xxxx Sandra xx

reply by DeboraDyess on 31-Dec-2021

I think you should have taken first place, having read her's, as well now. But ... Ah, what can we do... lol
I am stoked about your new novel and am heading over there now to read! And then to the workplace in my brain to complete your illustrations and those for the lady out of MIami. HHOPEfully I'll complete both by a week from today.
I tried to do a system restore on my computer and, instead, reloaded Windows. I lost all my apps, including paint.NET (my illustrating program) and my Office Suite. What a dunce! I'm hoping that when I reload it I will have all my work still tucked neatly away there. We'll see. But, if not, I know that much of it is here on FS, so that's not a total loss.
So off I go to read! I'm excited. 😁

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

Hi Sandra,
What a magical Christmassy tale for all the little children who hang on every word.
I have a very special granddaughter who would absolutely love this wonderful tale.
Beautifully crafted and with that special touch children truly love.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review and the sixth gold star, Shirley. I only arrived home from my holiday today so it was a lovely surprise! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Ken Weene

Exceptional

Nice bot of story telling. I can see it as an illustrated book for little ones. Bet it would do quite well as a holiday present. While not a fan of couplets, I think that for young children it is definitely the way to go.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021

Hi Ken, I'm so sorry it's taken so long to reply, but I've been on holiday and only got back today. Thank you so much for this lovely review, and the sixth golden star, I really appreciated it, and the nice surprise I had when coming back from my holiday. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I'm fifty reviews behind after my three-day stint in the hospital, but I'm doing my best to catch up. I apologize for the quickie cookie-cutter review and hopefully things will we be back to normal soon. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021

Ditto the last reply! lol. Keep well dear friend. Rest up and come back raring to go. Love and hugs. Sandra xx

Comment from NaughtieScribe

Exceptional

AAAWWWW, this is too frigging cute. I loved every line of this poem/short story. I smiled from beginning to end. I can so see someone's grandparent reading this story to eager little ones. I found nothing to tweak or adjust. Well Written, Well Done.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021

Aw, thank you so much for your lovely review, you gave me a smile, too!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

HI Sandra, this is such a sweet poem...
I loved reading it to the beat of The Night Before Christmas...I'm so happy Timmy and Tommy were
happy with the story...the birth of Jesus...hummmm...

I wonder if I read this to my girlfriends daughters
rats...if they would like it...when I talk to them
they look at me like they know what I'm saying...
we've become friends...or they just want more treats
sweet girl...

I love your poem my amazing friend...love the story told...and I know Noah would love it...The Hedgerow Caper Gang truly are cute little creatures you...written from the heart Sandra...it's a wonderful children's Christmas story...and the pictures are precious...love you to pieces...forever...and ever...and ever...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021

I've missed you! Thank you dearest Linda. I happen to know that rats love to listen to stories, Timmy and Tommy's friend, Reggie the Rat, loved them! Lol!! Thank you so much, my wonderful friend, for this lovely, fun review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. And a ginormous hug for that jolly nice sixth star!!!!!!
Now, will you please answer my email or pm, and let me know where you are????????????????????????????????????? Or I'll tell Santa someone's being a naughty girl!! Lol. Love always, my friend. Sandra xxx

reply by l.raven on 17-Nov-2021

I'm on my way to my email...LOL...LOL...
and your sooooo welcome beautiful you...
bunches of hugs and love coming your way...xxoo

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I love this imaginative story, with lovely rhyme, and very cute characters. It is a different slant on Christmas but celebrates the real birth of Jesus, no Santa or reindeer in view. Very best wishes for success in the Christmas Poetry contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021

Thank you so much, Wendy, for this really lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. And thank you for the best wishes, I really appreciate that. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx