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Lovers

Making love

5 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This trinet, Lovers, has the proper formatting and captures the sights and sounds of an energetic romp in the proverbial hay. "Loud shrieks" is usually a good sign of goal completion. Nice poem.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    Ciao Bill Schott!

    It was a bit disappointed , it was viewed 33 times but did not receive one single vote.

    I appreciate that you took the time to review it.

    Glad you enjoyed reading it.

    I hope you have a peaceful weekend.

    Ciao!

Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Now this is the last one on my list and if this is offering me to enlist you have caught my attention. That said, my wife is in another bed, and though alone she is not lonely as I am. (all of what I have written is baloney. Isn't that right, honey?)

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
    Last but not least then.

    Glad you enjoyed the read.

    Keep safe!
Comment from Sarah Tummey
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Should there be a sex warning on this, just in case kids are reading? You expressed it well in the third line. The last was funny. Maybe they need a new bed!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
    It definitely needs maintenance ( biggrin)

    I was not sure about using the sex warning .. so I decided to let the committee decide.

    Heard nothing from the judges so I must be okay . ( smile)

    Glad my last line made you laugh.

    Hope you have a great weekend.

    Keep safe!

Comment from Абдулло&
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I liked this inscription, because if you read this expression of words, you are captured by wonderful emotions and I think that it deserves 5 stars, so I will put 5 stars.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
    Glad that my wee poem had a wonderful emotional effect on you. thank you for sharing your thoughts.

    Your username tickled my curiosity.. I love the shape of the letters.

    I was disappointed when I saw you have no fortfolio.

    I googled the word .. are you from Tajikistan??
Comment from LisaMay
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The loud shrieks might also be coming from timid readers who didn't get a chance to be warned of such an intimate scene and actions.
You set the scene most graphically - I enjoyed the sensuous (although rather voyeuristic) scene conveyed through internal and end rhymes.
Maybe 'heart' should be 'hearts' - there are definitely 2 there.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
    Thank you for the helpful feedback , I added the s.

    There is nothing more natural than two making love .. (biggrin)

    Glad you enjoyed the rhyme through the narrative.

    A curiosity question: do you think the poem would be better without the pic just words?
reply by LisaMay on 19-Apr-2022
    Coincidence regarding your 'curiosity question': In my review I very nearly said your poem is so descriptive that it hardly needs the illustration.
    The title and your words are probably enough. I know there are some on this site who would blanche at such obvious sexual depiction (even though it is a natural activity and they probably engage in it themselves).
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
    Thank you I will remove the pic and put it back after the contest is done .

    I appreciate your helpful feedback.

    Take care!