A Heavenly Idea
100 words13 total reviews
Comment from Earl Corp
I like this one a lot. It's funny, makes sense, and gets right to the point. kudos for staying within the 100 word restriction. You have my vote. Good luck in the contest.
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I like this one a lot. It's funny, makes sense, and gets right to the point. kudos for staying within the 100 word restriction. You have my vote. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, A Heavenly Idea, has the proper word count and images the devil making a bid for the world, perhaps, but not closing the deal. Cute.
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This one-hundred-word story, A Heavenly Idea, has the proper word count and images the devil making a bid for the world, perhaps, but not closing the deal. Cute.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
A very detailed story in so few words. Great job! I wish you best of luck in the contest - it takes skill to convey ideas in such a limited word count!
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A very detailed story in so few words. Great job! I wish you best of luck in the contest - it takes skill to convey ideas in such a limited word count!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. Well written and follows the contest rules. It's hard to tell a complete story in 100 words but you managed well.
Funny story about Satan's temptation.
Well done! Good luck in the club
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Excellent entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. Well written and follows the contest rules. It's hard to tell a complete story in 100 words but you managed well.
Funny story about Satan's temptation.
Well done! Good luck in the club
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
So glad that the man's decent morals were in the back of his mind when he turned down the offer. He knew it was not the right thing to do and he wanted to live peacefully.
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So glad that the man's decent morals were in the back of his mind when he turned down the offer. He knew it was not the right thing to do and he wanted to live peacefully.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a great story, and I loved the last line. Sometimes we are all faced with those good deals. You did a wonderful job. Good luck in the contest, and enjoy your day. Shirley
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What a great story, and I loved the last line. Sometimes we are all faced with those good deals. You did a wonderful job. Good luck in the contest, and enjoy your day. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I truly thought this shot story was very good and then that ending was read, and I felt lost. Please explain what the property in the text was? Was it earthly or post mortal? Thanks.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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I truly thought this shot story was very good and then that ending was read, and I felt lost. Please explain what the property in the text was? Was it earthly or post mortal? Thanks.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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It was supposed be God rejecting a real estate deal from the Devil to buy Heaven and extendHell. Sorry if you didn't get it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The strength of the story, and the pleasure it provides come from the exciting plays on words that are threaded through it. I enjoyed my read very much.
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The strength of the story, and the pleasure it provides come from the exciting plays on words that are threaded through it. I enjoyed my read very much.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever write, good play on words and a moral code intertwined into this short story. I was entertained and I wish you well with the contest, this is a good contender, love Dolly x
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This is a clever write, good play on words and a moral code intertwined into this short story. I was entertained and I wish you well with the contest, this is a good contender, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from kiwisteveh
One of those tales where the reader has to go back and read the whole thing again in light of the ending revelation. I guess 'fire and brimstone' was the first clue, but 'wasn't just himself to worry about' may have been an early hint.
Nice job!
Steve
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One of those tales where the reader has to go back and read the whole thing again in light of the ending revelation. I guess 'fire and brimstone' was the first clue, but 'wasn't just himself to worry about' may have been an early hint.
Nice job!
Steve
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022