storm ahead
Naani poem (clouds crowd the cosmos)4 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco!
Not only does the thunderbolts roll but also your words when reading your lovely poem out loud.
Seasonal poems are very common on fanstory , so it's hard to come up with something original that impresses the reader.. yet you did just that.
My favourite parts :
silver sabers slash the skyline
thunderbolts TASE
And rolling tremors .
I know you prefer 5-7-5 or less so a naani was a big challenge for you , winning the blue ribbon proves that you have the chops to excel even in other formats.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Ciao Marco!
Not only does the thunderbolts roll but also your words when reading your lovely poem out loud.
Seasonal poems are very common on fanstory , so it's hard to come up with something original that impresses the reader.. yet you did just that.
My favourite parts :
silver sabers slash the skyline
thunderbolts TASE
And rolling tremors .
I know you prefer 5-7-5 or less so a naani was a big challenge for you , winning the blue ribbon proves that you have the chops to excel even in other formats.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I am always pleased with any podium placement. Expanding my typical 5-7-5 to enter this contest was not such a big leap. Besides my original in preview mode WAS 5-7-5!
Pleased you liked my word choices and the ?sounds? I created for you.
Mark
Comment from karenina
Congrats on second place. This is a beautiful Naani, and your alliteration is (as always) the icing on the cake! Love "thunderbolts tase"
Wish I'd thought of that! Keep them coming, Mark!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Congrats on second place. This is a beautiful Naani, and your alliteration is (as always) the icing on the cake! Love "thunderbolts tase"
Wish I'd thought of that! Keep them coming, Mark!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thanks K!
Always know you have got my back. Feel free to tase your ?taters? in the microwave (-;
M
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Hmmm. Tase instead of "nuke" ---
Less violent I think!
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If I was a criminal and the police were trying to subdue me, I would take the tase(r) over the nuke LOL
I do ?nuke? my milk sometimes for a hot chocolate (-;
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I'm all for avoiding nuclear proliferation... Except, of course, for milk...or tea!
(It's so messy to tase those!)
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your poem very much. I especially admire your alliteration on the first three lines. You created a lovely image. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed your poem very much. I especially admire your alliteration on the first three lines. You created a lovely image. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your compliments on this Naani contest post.
Comment from Julie G1
This poem and well chosen graphic worked for this reader. Nice, clear, succinct message in the verse. You answered the task well. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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This poem and well chosen graphic worked for this reader. Nice, clear, succinct message in the verse. You answered the task well. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Pleased to comply about my continuing to write more.