The Gobbledegooks
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Comment from Brandon Clark
Awesome poem! Your creativity is on full display in this. You also did excellent showing reader a vision of the scene that you likely pictured as writing it! Very cool poem and Congratulations on winning the contest; very well deserved.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Awesome poem! Your creativity is on full display in this. You also did excellent showing reader a vision of the scene that you likely pictured as writing it! Very cool poem and Congratulations on winning the contest; very well deserved.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Brandon - glad you enjoyed!
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Steve,
This story is long but read very quickly with the smooth meter and easy rhyme. It shows how happy a kingdom is when royal babies are born.
I like all the made up monsters and the fantasy characters. You name most of them. I think you left out dwarves. I think you should leave out the banshee singing because that is an omen of death. And we wouldn't want one of those babies dying. Maybe include hobbits there.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Hi Steve,
This story is long but read very quickly with the smooth meter and easy rhyme. It shows how happy a kingdom is when royal babies are born.
I like all the made up monsters and the fantasy characters. You name most of them. I think you left out dwarves. I think you should leave out the banshee singing because that is an omen of death. And we wouldn't want one of those babies dying. Maybe include hobbits there.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Joan - glad you enjoyed.
In the Kingdom of Gobbledegook, even traditionally evil creatures like banshees are benevolent!
Steve
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I guess that is true.
Joan
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so enjoyable and reads with a rollicking beat. I have not read the previous excerpts, but I know with your skill and talent, they must be wonderful too. Well done, Steve, a fun read. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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This is so enjoyable and reads with a rollicking beat. I have not read the previous excerpts, but I know with your skill and talent, they must be wonderful too. Well done, Steve, a fun read. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Melissa - glad you enjoyed this little frolic!
Steve
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent poem in every sense of the word, the meter and flow the syllable count and rhyming all great as well, but not only that but you've done everything you could to cavort, cajole and entertain, articulately well, good job Steve, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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This is an excellent poem in every sense of the word, the meter and flow the syllable count and rhyming all great as well, but not only that but you've done everything you could to cavort, cajole and entertain, articulately well, good job Steve, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Many thanks, Roy. I am glad you enjoyed this rollicking tale. I rather thought I had finished with these folk, but it seems that they weren't quite finished with me!
Steve
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You?ve cleverly hung on them. Steve, that?s clever,
Comment from damommy
Very good. I love stories like this. The meter is perfect as are the rhymes. I'm not familiar with Gobbledegooks before this, but I'll have to go back and catch up. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Very good. I love stories like this. The meter is perfect as are the rhymes. I'm not familiar with Gobbledegooks before this, but I'll have to go back and catch up. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Yvonne. There are eight poems altogether - they are all fun!
Steve
Comment from bob cullen
This is quite brilliant with delightful and very creative rhyming. In my honest opinion, this poem confirms my long-held belief that you rate as one of the sites better poets. In particular I love your irreverence. Great work and deserving of every one of those six stars.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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This is quite brilliant with delightful and very creative rhyming. In my honest opinion, this poem confirms my long-held belief that you rate as one of the sites better poets. In particular I love your irreverence. Great work and deserving of every one of those six stars.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Irreverent? Me?? Surely not.
Many thanks, Bob. I appreciate the warmth of your opinion and of course the sixth star.
Hope all is well with you and yours. Interesting times we live in and sometimes downright worrisome. I am happy to be living far away from the hurly-burly.
Steve
Comment from Douglas Goff
Your imagination is amuck. Amuck I say! You had better wrangle it in before even more fantastical pieces spew forth from your fantastic spirit!
Nice work. I enjoy and appreciate you. Please keep pouring forth the entertainment!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Your imagination is amuck. Amuck I say! You had better wrangle it in before even more fantastical pieces spew forth from your fantastic spirit!
Nice work. I enjoy and appreciate you. Please keep pouring forth the entertainment!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Doug - and welcome to FanStory - I hope you like it here.
Yep, once I get started on one of these, the nonsense just keeps pouring out. You should take a look at some of the earlier poems in this series.
Steve
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The poem was so very good!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You have a great rhythm in this story poem continuing the story of Hilda and Rupert. I could see this as a brightly artworked children's book as I was reading. Nice one, Steve.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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You have a great rhythm in this story poem continuing the story of Hilda and Rupert. I could see this as a brightly artworked children's book as I was reading. Nice one, Steve.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Valda.
I haven't written one of these for a while - in fact I'd basically called it quits on the Gobbledegooks. Seems they had more to offer!
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing our Gobbledegook friends with us in this story in a poem contest entry. I am so happy the twins were born safe and soundly. LOL I enjoyed reading this entry and wish you luck with the contest. I haven't seen you posting lately. I hope your only busy and nothing more serious.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing our Gobbledegook friends with us in this story in a poem contest entry. I am so happy the twins were born safe and soundly. LOL I enjoyed reading this entry and wish you luck with the contest. I haven't seen you posting lately. I hope your only busy and nothing more serious.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Barbara, thanks for the kind review of my Gobbledegooks poem - glad you enjoyed this piece of fun. Yep, i haven't been writing much lately - just not especially motivated and there have been many other things taking up my time.
Steve