Dribbles And Drabbles
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Arrivederci"A Collection Of Mini Stories
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Comment from JSD
Not sure what a 'Dribble' is. Clearly very short. This is a fun and entertaining post, despite the sad demise of the poor moth. Interesting he buzzes round your skull, not your head. Is he a moth of the imagination?
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Not sure what a 'Dribble' is. Clearly very short. This is a fun and entertaining post, despite the sad demise of the poor moth. Interesting he buzzes round your skull, not your head. Is he a moth of the imagination?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Dribble = 50 word story. Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I must recognize mastery:) in a few words you put poor George through so much. First I thought about Allan Poe, then the final erase all the seriousness and brought me a laugh:"George knocked himself out. Investigating, you accidentally stepped down and crushed him. Saddened by his demise, it's arrivederci to your pet. Bye-bye, George.". Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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I must recognize mastery:) in a few words you put poor George through so much. First I thought about Allan Poe, then the final erase all the seriousness and brought me a laugh:"George knocked himself out. Investigating, you accidentally stepped down and crushed him. Saddened by his demise, it's arrivederci to your pet. Bye-bye, George.". Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Wendy G
Well, that was a short life for the poor moth, but I'm sure he was much loved between landing on your hand and his rapid demise. Fun little story! Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Well, that was a short life for the poor moth, but I'm sure he was much loved between landing on your hand and his rapid demise. Fun little story! Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Spitfire
the narrator is a lonesome man who finds some cheer in befriending a moth who visits him for a second and then almost kills itself. The man accidentally steps on the moth and crushes it. Having named his new 'friend', he now bids it an Italian farewell . A fun read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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the narrator is a lonesome man who finds some cheer in befriending a moth who visits him for a second and then almost kills itself. The man accidentally steps on the moth and crushes it. Having named his new 'friend', he now bids it an Italian farewell . A fun read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from royowen
Heheh. What a fascinating thing, creating a pet and then accidentally being the cause of his demise, somehow it seems fated to somehow be a happening, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Heheh. What a fascinating thing, creating a pet and then accidentally being the cause of his demise, somehow it seems fated to somehow be a happening, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Appreciate the review and your comments.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ric Myworld
You always have a way of taking me back to places in time, even when you don't mean to. How my little turtle got out of the bowl I don't know. But I didn't find it soon enough, before my little brother bit his head off. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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You always have a way of taking me back to places in time, even when you don't mean to. How my little turtle got out of the bowl I don't know. But I didn't find it soon enough, before my little brother bit his head off. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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What a demise for that little turtle.But, leave it to little brothers to do unique stunts like bite their heads off.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Dang. You managed to elicit several emotions from me. First was wonder as I have never so much as touched a moth, then there was empathy as he careened into the windowpane. And the last emotion was guilt. Killing the poor moth even if it was unintentional was sobering. Great piece of flash. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Dang. You managed to elicit several emotions from me. First was wonder as I have never so much as touched a moth, then there was empathy as he careened into the windowpane. And the last emotion was guilt. Killing the poor moth even if it was unintentional was sobering. Great piece of flash. Gretchen
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good work. A story in fifty words.
I just hope that wasn't your only 'pet', or your first after losing a lifelong pet that near broke your heart in its passing. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Good work. A story in fifty words.
I just hope that wasn't your only 'pet', or your first after losing a lifelong pet that near broke your heart in its passing. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Mine have always had four legs and barked. So much better than most people. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This made me smile as having a moth as a friend means the friendship will be short lived, a fun post Brett and I loved the humour within, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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This made me smile as having a moth as a friend means the friendship will be short lived, a fun post Brett and I loved the humour within, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Poor George. You wrote a quick story and made quick work of George. Hopefully, next time the protagonist will choose a larger pet. I enjoyed this Dribble and will check out other chapters in your book. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Poor George. You wrote a quick story and made quick work of George. Hopefully, next time the protagonist will choose a larger pet. I enjoyed this Dribble and will check out other chapters in your book. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.