Guided by Faith
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Comment from w.j.debi
The dialogue flows naturally. The camaraderie among this tight-knit community is heartening. It's great that everyone pitches in to help Emma in her time of trouble. They also benefit from her singing and playing her new guitar.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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The dialogue flows naturally. The camaraderie among this tight-knit community is heartening. It's great that everyone pitches in to help Emma in her time of trouble. They also benefit from her singing and playing her new guitar.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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You are so precious. Thank you for reading.
Comment from amahra
I'm beginning another novella, plus working with a narrator on the book I just finished ghostwriting, but I just had to peek in on your new book. Though starting at chapter 23, your characters are so rich and the dialogue so well-written that I like them already. I don't know if this is a particular scene or the theme throughout, but I love the faith-based scenes. They are believable based on my own faith experience. As for romance, you can't have romance in every chapter; apparently that person doesn't know there has to be plot and character development. I wouldn't waste time with such shortsightedness. Great job, Barbra. Oh, there is one thing that puzzled me... I don't get this dialogue..."It'd work." Do you mean [It'll work]? [It'd worked]?
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I'm beginning another novella, plus working with a narrator on the book I just finished ghostwriting, but I just had to peek in on your new book. Though starting at chapter 23, your characters are so rich and the dialogue so well-written that I like them already. I don't know if this is a particular scene or the theme throughout, but I love the faith-based scenes. They are believable based on my own faith experience. As for romance, you can't have romance in every chapter; apparently that person doesn't know there has to be plot and character development. I wouldn't waste time with such shortsightedness. Great job, Barbra. Oh, there is one thing that puzzled me... I don't get this dialogue..."It'd work." Do you mean [It'll work]? [It'd worked]?
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I rechecked that area, I was thinking 'It'd work' for 'It would work'. Since you questioned it, I changed it to 'It'll work'. I was thinking about you a few days ago. I'm glad you're doing well. I've missed your postings and reviews. I hope your back.
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No, I'm not quite back yet. I'm focusing on a period book, 19th century and I know you know how challenging they can be with all the reseach. But I will look in as often as I can. And thank you for missing me. Smile
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm all over the place this week, Barbara. I've some personal upsets happening, and I've not been able to get much done. I've been checking through my 'comments' and noticed I hadn't read yours yet. I'm so sorry.
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much, it's a nice continuation. Although they only met 23 days ago, they've seen each other everyday and for long periods, probably the eaquivalent to many in their entire courtship. I can seen this turning soon, and both will come out and share they feelings for one another. Their friends already see this. But you are heading towards it fast now. Well done!! Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I'm all over the place this week, Barbara. I've some personal upsets happening, and I've not been able to get much done. I've been checking through my 'comments' and noticed I hadn't read yours yet. I'm so sorry.
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much, it's a nice continuation. Although they only met 23 days ago, they've seen each other everyday and for long periods, probably the eaquivalent to many in their entire courtship. I can seen this turning soon, and both will come out and share they feelings for one another. Their friends already see this. But you are heading towards it fast now. Well done!! Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, I like to establish a relationship first.
Comment from Paul Manton
Thank you for this beautifully written account of a mature and integrated community, with God at its heart. It reminds me of my own church in Barnet, North London - with the kind of generosity I have seen regularly for people we care for.
An added frisson for me is that I knew Graham Kendrick when we were both worship leaders in Wolverhampton - the then center of British Youth for Christ. When 'Shine, Jesus, Shine' arrived, my church were singing it 'hot off the press'!
Your group of characters seems to share all that joy - and a resilience to heal after the harm which has been done to Molly and Emma. I confess I didn't read this story for a while, and have missed important antecedents.
Nevertheless, a really engrossing read. Thank you.
Paul
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you for this beautifully written account of a mature and integrated community, with God at its heart. It reminds me of my own church in Barnet, North London - with the kind of generosity I have seen regularly for people we care for.
An added frisson for me is that I knew Graham Kendrick when we were both worship leaders in Wolverhampton - the then center of British Youth for Christ. When 'Shine, Jesus, Shine' arrived, my church were singing it 'hot off the press'!
Your group of characters seems to share all that joy - and a resilience to heal after the harm which has been done to Molly and Emma. I confess I didn't read this story for a while, and have missed important antecedents.
Nevertheless, a really engrossing read. Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement and I hope you drop by again.
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I shall drop by for the rest of the year, Barbara.
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Thank you, I appreciate it.
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Welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Mark Childs
Sorry, I just wasn't getting a sense of smooth flow. The story seemed to jump around quickly and with the large number of characters, it never really seemed to settle in to focus on one central storyline.
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Sorry, I just wasn't getting a sense of smooth flow. The story seemed to jump around quickly and with the large number of characters, it never really seemed to settle in to focus on one central storyline.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. The story is over halfway completed. Maybe if you'd read from the beginning, you wouldn't feel that way.
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I believe you are correct.
Comment from Pam (respa)
This is a very good chapter that brings things up to date regarding all the things people have done to help Emma. It was very touching that they replaced her guitar, and others helped with the vet bills. She was overwhelmed, which anyone would be after all of the kindness.
It sounds like there was a good crew at the Winters' home for dinner, and everyone enjoyed it. It was a good way to unwind with everything that has been going on. But after that, it was back to business for Seth.
He helps Emma make arrangements for Molly by taking care of her medicine and food, as well as the sleeping arrangements. It sounds like something serious is going on and it will be interesting to see how it all plays out.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This is a very good chapter that brings things up to date regarding all the things people have done to help Emma. It was very touching that they replaced her guitar, and others helped with the vet bills. She was overwhelmed, which anyone would be after all of the kindness.
It sounds like there was a good crew at the Winters' home for dinner, and everyone enjoyed it. It was a good way to unwind with everything that has been going on. But after that, it was back to business for Seth.
He helps Emma make arrangements for Molly by taking care of her medicine and food, as well as the sleeping arrangements. It sounds like something serious is going on and it will be interesting to see how it all plays out.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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It is serious and we'll find out Sunday. We'll finally meet the stalker. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome. It sounds like it is definitely going to be serious!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a very good chapter, and I did not think it was too long. It is easy to read with no weird or overlong words and it does have romance. It does not have the heavy breathing and body parts of a lot of romances (which often read like porn) and I appreciate that. You can tell the age of your reader when they don't think this is romance.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This was a very good chapter, and I did not think it was too long. It is easy to read with no weird or overlong words and it does have romance. It does not have the heavy breathing and body parts of a lot of romances (which often read like porn) and I appreciate that. You can tell the age of your reader when they don't think this is romance.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and the support.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That poor little pooch's got a nasty cut that's terrible. I'm glad Emma got a guitar, Gibson, no less, that's nice, very good. But I hopes the dogs gonna get better.
It's an interesting story you've got here.
Enjoy your writing style too, it's really good. Because if I come across the book or story of some sort but doesn't grab me right off the hop. I tend to get bored and move on to something else. That did not happen with your story
I was fully engaged with your characters, pastor. Jake, Molly, good work.
Punctuation sentence structure or subject matter, really good job. That's the block to you and I hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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That poor little pooch's got a nasty cut that's terrible. I'm glad Emma got a guitar, Gibson, no less, that's nice, very good. But I hopes the dogs gonna get better.
It's an interesting story you've got here.
Enjoy your writing style too, it's really good. Because if I come across the book or story of some sort but doesn't grab me right off the hop. I tend to get bored and move on to something else. That did not happen with your story
I was fully engaged with your characters, pastor. Jake, Molly, good work.
Punctuation sentence structure or subject matter, really good job. That's the block to you and I hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great dialogue. It felt real genuine and realistic. It also appears that the Elliot's have turned over a new leaf, although I am skeptical.
I be only ever seen the word fundraiser as one word so I would double-check that.
Enjoyable.
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Great dialogue. It felt real genuine and realistic. It also appears that the Elliot's have turned over a new leaf, although I am skeptical.
I be only ever seen the word fundraiser as one word so I would double-check that.
Enjoyable.
D
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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You're correct about fundraiser and I've corrected it. Thank you for the catch. I always appreciate help. Sometimes my brain takes a vacation. LOL
Comment from bhogg
many of your posts are feel good posts. This one certainly was...I mean dogs, church families and love. What more could your readers ask for? By the way, thanks for getting Lee (Humpwhistle) hooked up with me. He is totally gifted and I look forward to getting his posts off-site. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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many of your posts are feel good posts. This one certainly was...I mean dogs, church families and love. What more could your readers ask for? By the way, thanks for getting Lee (Humpwhistle) hooked up with me. He is totally gifted and I look forward to getting his posts off-site. Bill
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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I'm glad I could help. Thank you for the kind review.