What We See
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, I'm catching up. This was a great chapter. I really enjoyed it. His fast thinking and skill got rid of bothe his adversaries without killing them. What a great chapter and well written. Now on to the next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Hi Jim, I'm catching up. This was a great chapter. I really enjoyed it. His fast thinking and skill got rid of bothe his adversaries without killing them. What a great chapter and well written. Now on to the next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Yeah, I didn't want to have any deaths spoiling his enjoyment of the future. Unrealistic, perhaps, but hey--I love a nice tidy ending.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well Alan did well dispensing of Warren and Dennis with a still good throwing arm catching Warren off guard and then Dennis as well.Very compassionate of him to leave the phone handy for the emergency call. A good chapter Jim, getting Alan out of this predicament.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Well Alan did well dispensing of Warren and Dennis with a still good throwing arm catching Warren off guard and then Dennis as well.Very compassionate of him to leave the phone handy for the emergency call. A good chapter Jim, getting Alan out of this predicament.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thanks, Valda. I didn't want anyone to die, but just to get roughed up some.
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray! Baseball skills to the rescue! I'm glad that you found a way for Alan to get his hard drive and wipe out the nasty brothers without killing them. I wonder how Alan will explain everything without Ginnie getting a heart attack from the dangers he survived!
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Hooray! Baseball skills to the rescue! I'm glad that you found a way for Alan to get his hard drive and wipe out the nasty brothers without killing them. I wonder how Alan will explain everything without Ginnie getting a heart attack from the dangers he survived!
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Yep, might as well bring his baseball skills back into the story, though we're not quite through with baseball yet. I really didn't want to saddle Alan with the regrets of killing someone, hence the approach of merely disabling them.
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But what if Warren and his brother go after Alan? I guess calling the police when they have a long rap sheet isn't likely.
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I guess that's always a possibility. Maybe food for a sequel?
Comment from BethShelby
This was quite a feat you had Alan pull off. The guy had luck on his side and a lot of courage. I wonder if he will ever tell his wife all he went through. She will be fortunate to get him back. I didn't see a way of excape. It's a great story by the way. There were time things seem to be a little too smoothly but the last two chapters have made up for that.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This was quite a feat you had Alan pull off. The guy had luck on his side and a lot of courage. I wonder if he will ever tell his wife all he went through. She will be fortunate to get him back. I didn't see a way of excape. It's a great story by the way. There were time things seem to be a little too smoothly but the last two chapters have made up for that.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thanks, Beth. That's the main reason for the last two chapters. Things went a little too smoothly in getting his patent rights, and that didn't feel like much of a climax.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Alan had much more of the tough guy in him than I expected. He also had good luck thanks to a round rock and a useless fun that mad the brother fall down the stairs. Now it can end in two chapters. Good action and exciting climax.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Alan had much more of the tough guy in him than I expected. He also had good luck thanks to a round rock and a useless fun that mad the brother fall down the stairs. Now it can end in two chapters. Good action and exciting climax.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thanks, Carol. I don't think he ever expected to use the gun in quite that way, but it's a good thing he had it. Nothing left but the denouement.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I had to open a bag of popcorn for this chapter. Including Alan's thoughts as he tried to find a way out of his predicament added mystery and suspense. When Dennis came in, it added an unexpected element of surprise for both Alan and the reader. Beneath Alan's initial quiet and subdued personality was a quick thinking bold man of action. He's on his way to a happy ending.
shovel-fulls (shovels full)
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I had to open a bag of popcorn for this chapter. Including Alan's thoughts as he tried to find a way out of his predicament added mystery and suspense. When Dennis came in, it added an unexpected element of surprise for both Alan and the reader. Beneath Alan's initial quiet and subdued personality was a quick thinking bold man of action. He's on his way to a happy ending.
shovel-fulls (shovels full)
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Lorraine. Hope you enjoyed the popcorn. Turns out, both of us are wrong. I looked it up and the word is actually shovelfuls. Who'd have thought?
Comment from tfawcus
He certainly came up with an effective solution after talking his way through alternatives. I' surprised he didn't kill either of them. It must have been his lucky day. A rock to the head at 90 mph sounds pretty lethal to me, as does falling backwards down stairs.
All set now for the happy ending!
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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He certainly came up with an effective solution after talking his way through alternatives. I' surprised he didn't kill either of them. It must have been his lucky day. A rock to the head at 90 mph sounds pretty lethal to me, as does falling backwards down stairs.
All set now for the happy ending!
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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I agree about the lethality, but I didn't want to do anything to spoil his eventual success in getting the hard drive back and putting a damper on his "happy ending."
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
He really has turned into an action hero here and it's great! It's as if all that time he was teaching and recovering from his ill-treatment, this alter ego inside him was bursting to get out. His initiative and sang-froid have won the day. This is an excellent chapter propelling us to a finale (so I assume this awful pair will recover and there'll be no consequences from the police). No errors noted and an enjoyable read! Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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He really has turned into an action hero here and it's great! It's as if all that time he was teaching and recovering from his ill-treatment, this alter ego inside him was bursting to get out. His initiative and sang-froid have won the day. This is an excellent chapter propelling us to a finale (so I assume this awful pair will recover and there'll be no consequences from the police). No errors noted and an enjoyable read! Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. Tired of being a victim of ill-treatment, he decides he has to do something to fight back. Perhaps not the most realistic scenario, but hopefully it was fun.
Comment from royowen
Well this was a great episode, and although Warren had the drop on him, his thrown stone was a little like David downing Goliath deftly with that thrown stone, and then Dennis. Warren's brother appeared, but a thrown hard drive disabled him, so much so Alan calls for help, what now? Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Well this was a great episode, and although Warren had the drop on him, his thrown stone was a little like David downing Goliath deftly with that thrown stone, and then Dennis. Warren's brother appeared, but a thrown hard drive disabled him, so much so Alan calls for help, what now? Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Glad you enjoyed it, Roy. Some have pointed out that the rock should have killed Warren, but I didn't want Alan to have to contend with that, and I wanted him to be able to enjoy his success to the fullest.
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I agree
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Only two left? Say it ain't so, Jim. Good writing here Mister. I have enjoyed all of your chapters, even if I don't always have time to review them. You know how to hold our interest. Karen
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Only two left? Say it ain't so, Jim. Good writing here Mister. I have enjoyed all of your chapters, even if I don't always have time to review them. You know how to hold our interest. Karen
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Karen. Glad you've been enjoying the story. Nothing left to get in his way now, so we'll see what he does with his success.
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I see him opening up his own school for those with learning problems. And computer work and small appliance repair are part of the curriculum. Training your brain to think in more than one way. Treating dyslexia as a foreign language is one way to go. :-) Karen
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That wasn't what I thought of, but that would have been a great direction for Alan. Love the idea.
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Great minds and all that! What's next. I will need a new fix. :-)
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I still see you as a 1940's private eye, skulking around corners, finding hidden clues.
Ethel, the chain-smoking gargoyle, is your secretary and watchdog. She keeps a loaded
Smith and Wesson in her drawer "Just in case". Clyde, the light-fingered janitor, still limps slightly. :-)
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Love your imagination!
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I have a general idea I need to flesh out some more. There will probably be a few shorter pieces first, though.
The premise I'm thinking of for the new novel is: developing an extremely effective pain-killer that is non-addictive.
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Big Pharma will hunt you down like a rabid dog. :-)
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I have been a muse for people through the years. I am great at giving a thumbnail idea, but not so good on the follow through. I am a poet and short story writer. Small and quick is my game. Find em' kill em' bury them deep. :-)