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Collection of a Lifetime

Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Cannonball"
a collection of poetry and experience

7 total reviews 
Comment from jaded831
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Indeed you painted a picture, in my mind, I saw a child jumping into a pile of leaves. Hopefully in a park and not one someone raked up. Great entry so far yours is the best.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Wendy G
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A lovely poem which brings the scene to vivid life. Are you In Advanced Editing? You will need to be, I think, for choice of font and size. Sometimes for unknown reasons, it drops back to Standard Editing. Nevertheless your presentation is very pleasing. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
    I do use advanced editing & I can open font & size, but the scroll bar on the side doesn't appear for me to move it past the first few selections. I've tried shifting screen percentage which sometimes works in other sites, but I can't fix it.Thanks so much for the review!
Comment from Amelie Johns
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I enjoyed reading your nature Haiku. I wouldn't worry about the formatting difficulties you experienced. Your poem alone is impressive without any of that. Thanks for sharing and wishing you all the best in this contest.
Amelie

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Katiemae1977
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Love jumping and diving in those leave piles!
You 2nd line is hard to read. Can you use a darker font.
I really like this and no picture necessary. I can view the whole thing.
Well done and good luck
Katiemae1977

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thanks so much! I was trying to use leaf colors since we couldn't use a picture, but I'll see if there's anything darker.
Comment from jessizero
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This haiku worked well without a picture. You clearly got your point across, and the colors of the font helped illustrate. You also got the syllable count right. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Cannonball, has the proper word count and bears witness to the joyful jumping into the raked pile of fallen leaves out there in the front yard.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Begin Again
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I remember watching my grandchildren go crazy when the leaves were raked and piled high, diving or, as you say, "cannonballing" into them. Of course, they all had to be raked again. Good job!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much!