Zombie Cereal
5-7-5 haiku contest entry12 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form and has the playful tone I would expect from this contest
Love your use of onomatopoeia in the opening line and the consonance of hard C sounds in crackle, snack/scared
I'm still laughing at the satori line concept of how zombies deprive the worms of rotting bodies to feed on:-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form and has the playful tone I would expect from this contest
Love your use of onomatopoeia in the opening line and the consonance of hard C sounds in crackle, snack/scared
I'm still laughing at the satori line concept of how zombies deprive the worms of rotting bodies to feed on:-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Brooke, I appreciate you stopping by to read and review one of my whimsical pieces. Faye
Comment from ShekinahGlory
Fayesh, You did a great job with capturing the zombies preferred food, and the picture captures it, too. Great sound effects! Yucky! "Depriving the worms" is a great close. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Fayesh, You did a great job with capturing the zombies preferred food, and the picture captures it, too. Great sound effects! Yucky! "Depriving the worms" is a great close. Great job!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from seashellrees4
lol! lol! I love the picture combined with your Zombie Haiku. Very funny, very gruesome, I feel sorry for the worms - no dinner. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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lol! lol! I love the picture combined with your Zombie Haiku. Very funny, very gruesome, I feel sorry for the worms - no dinner. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, fayesh, you did a great job writing this cute zombie haiku about the zombie snacks that scooby would shy away from. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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this is very well written, fayesh, you did a great job writing this cute zombie haiku about the zombie snacks that scooby would shy away from. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from Galactia
nicw work with your creative verse and presentation. loved it.
snap, crackle, pop snack (5)
of scared humans still alive (7)
depriving the worms (5)
I especially love your first and funny last line.
great job and GL
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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nicw work with your creative verse and presentation. loved it.
snap, crackle, pop snack (5)
of scared humans still alive (7)
depriving the worms (5)
I especially love your first and funny last line.
great job and GL
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from Patti R.
Completely and totally the Zombie perspective, that live humans are merely depriving the worms. Great 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest. I'm not a fan of zombie stuff, but do love Rice Krispies!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Completely and totally the Zombie perspective, that live humans are merely depriving the worms. Great 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest. I'm not a fan of zombie stuff, but do love Rice Krispies!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from Vladilynn
Whoa!! your domain food is kinda....appetizing! Lol
(afraid to say more, I don't want you to pop out my screen) Lol
Very neaty piece, never thought that a zombie is thinking of being healthy and being in a piramide diet. Healthy and juicy, I guess! lolz
Thank you for sharing and good luck!
Love much,
Lynn:0)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Whoa!! your domain food is kinda....appetizing! Lol
(afraid to say more, I don't want you to pop out my screen) Lol
Very neaty piece, never thought that a zombie is thinking of being healthy and being in a piramide diet. Healthy and juicy, I guess! lolz
Thank you for sharing and good luck!
Love much,
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow love these haiku contests and this ones a scary cracker i love your entry all the creepy wonder of zombies in a few great words good luck my friend gazza
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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wow love these haiku contests and this ones a scary cracker i love your entry all the creepy wonder of zombies in a few great words good luck my friend gazza
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from Allison78
Not a very nice visual with that one, lol! I think this is a great zombie poem. Well written and fun to read, good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Not a very nice visual with that one, lol! I think this is a great zombie poem. Well written and fun to read, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.
Comment from ajdevore
Well, this is downright witty. It would be kind of macabre were it not for the title and diagram which gives the entire piece a dash of whimsy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Well, this is downright witty. It would be kind of macabre were it not for the title and diagram which gives the entire piece a dash of whimsy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my zombie haiku.