Poems
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Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good form and I just love the play on words with the literal reading of the figurative idiom beside themselves
Save yourself some grief and drop the upper case letters in case some of the Japanese form experts visit your poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
Your poem is in good form and I just love the play on words with the literal reading of the figurative idiom beside themselves
Save yourself some grief and drop the upper case letters in case some of the Japanese form experts visit your poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing and for the advice. Bill
Comment from bard owl
My husband is an identical twin and I know how close he and his brother are in the way they think and do things. The word play is right on! Excellent senryu! Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
My husband is an identical twin and I know how close he and his brother are in the way they think and do things. The word play is right on! Excellent senryu! Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from dmt1967
Twins feel everything each other feel I hear very good poem I like the line 'besides themselves' this is a good admonition of twins thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
Twins feel everything each other feel I hear very good poem I like the line 'besides themselves' this is a good admonition of twins thank you for sharing
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Saucey
Lol, boy what a play on words, the flow is right, the pic is an appropriate dandy and I absolutely love it, made the few words pop and play. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
Lol, boy what a play on words, the flow is right, the pic is an appropriate dandy and I absolutely love it, made the few words pop and play. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Kevin C
I love this. I know twin girls and they are like that. Great image in so few words that read so well. You definitely gave me a chuckle with this well written senryu.
Thank you for sharing.
Kevin
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
I love this. I know twin girls and they are like that. Great image in so few words that read so well. You definitely gave me a chuckle with this well written senryu.
Thank you for sharing.
Kevin
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. Bill
Comment from terry drake
Flirting play with your words. I enjoyed the presentation and the was the senryu was written. You did a fine job on your presentation and I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
Flirting play with your words. I enjoyed the presentation and the was the senryu was written. You did a fine job on your presentation and I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing me. Bill