Venus
The wonder of you18 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Mary,
to look up into the sky and not see this shining light echoing its beauty back at me would tell me love had died... or at least it has got too damn hot and exploded.
This is a wonderfully constructed rhyming Whitney poem which conjurer's up the thought, why are women supposed to come from such a hot planet and men from one so cold... is someone trying to tell us men something?
With our thoughts we create,
a view to love,
James xx
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Hi Mary,
to look up into the sky and not see this shining light echoing its beauty back at me would tell me love had died... or at least it has got too damn hot and exploded.
This is a wonderfully constructed rhyming Whitney poem which conjurer's up the thought, why are women supposed to come from such a hot planet and men from one so cold... is someone trying to tell us men something?
With our thoughts we create,
a view to love,
James xx
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the great comments. Mary
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mary
I enjoyed your nature Whitney. Perfect syllable count, and good rhymes. I like the inclusion of Venus, always bright in the sky. Aren't there supposed to be women there? Men, from Mars...women, from Venus? Why are the astronauts bent on heading to Mars then? You'd think they'd want to go to Venus. Maybe it's all the acid rain and poison gas that turned them away. S'pose?
Good Luck in the contest! And thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hi Mary
I enjoyed your nature Whitney. Perfect syllable count, and good rhymes. I like the inclusion of Venus, always bright in the sky. Aren't there supposed to be women there? Men, from Mars...women, from Venus? Why are the astronauts bent on heading to Mars then? You'd think they'd want to go to Venus. Maybe it's all the acid rain and poison gas that turned them away. S'pose?
Good Luck in the contest! And thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the review and the comments. Yes Venus is symbolically linked to female, and Mars is linked to men.The planet Venus is totally inhabitable, too close to the Sun, over 800 degree Celsius. The next mission to Mars is planned in two years time, for two couples. They will not have a return plan. I wish them luck. Mary
Comment from Capricorn30
Excellent!
A well-penned Whitney of celestial love and beauty;
A fine dedication to the goddess of love, as like the planet, love also shines brightly.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Excellent!
A well-penned Whitney of celestial love and beauty;
A fine dedication to the goddess of love, as like the planet, love also shines brightly.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review, Mary
Comment from JuneYvonne
Venus is the one planet we can often see easily with the naked eye, and she shines brightly in the evening or morning as your poem suggests. This is a lovely whitney which meets all the requirements and creates an ethereal image.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
June
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Venus is the one planet we can often see easily with the naked eye, and she shines brightly in the evening or morning as your poem suggests. This is a lovely whitney which meets all the requirements and creates an ethereal image.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
June
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review. Mary
Comment from Domino 2
indeed, Mary - Venus is a special bright star - isn't it where you ladies come from - and us blokes come from dull old Mars. :-)
Excellent whitney.
Good luck, Ted
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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indeed, Mary - Venus is a special bright star - isn't it where you ladies come from - and us blokes come from dull old Mars. :-)
Excellent whitney.
Good luck, Ted
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Yes Ted, symbolically speaking, Men are from Mars and Women are from Venus, I think you know more than you let on. Thanks for the review. Mary
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:-) xx
Comment from robina1978
The artwork is marvelous and complements you poem well. I have seen many nature Whitney's by now ad it will be a difficult choice. Yours fulfilled all the requirements and is very original. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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The artwork is marvelous and complements you poem well. I have seen many nature Whitney's by now ad it will be a difficult choice. Yours fulfilled all the requirements and is very original. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review and wonderful comments. Mary
Comment from country ranch writer
looks so beautiful her looking there so still and in wonderment, very good picture pick to go with your poem and I feel it has put a shine back in our lives
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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looks so beautiful her looking there so still and in wonderment, very good picture pick to go with your poem and I feel it has put a shine back in our lives
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Mary
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welcome
Comment from RGstar
Nice little angelic piece.
Beautiful image and strong imagery.
Good luck in the competition, Mary.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Nice little angelic piece.
Beautiful image and strong imagery.
Good luck in the competition, Mary.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you RG for the great review. Mary
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is just lovely. The simplicity of the imagery allows each word to shine brightly for the reader much like the goddess (or planet depending on your perspective) herself. Very well done and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This is just lovely. The simplicity of the imagery allows each word to shine brightly for the reader much like the goddess (or planet depending on your perspective) herself. Very well done and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful comments. Mary
Comment from krys123
I truly like your poem very much it has great imagery and the picture complements the poem very much and vice a versa. Venus, the god of love signs both day and night. I like that adage very much. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I truly like your poem very much it has great imagery and the picture complements the poem very much and vice a versa. Venus, the god of love signs both day and night. I like that adage very much. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thanks Alex for the great review. Mary
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You are so welcome